Talk:Manchester by the Sea (film)/GA2

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:59, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

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• " was soon picked up by Amazon Studios for" remove "soon" —  Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 20:37, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• Non-breaking spaces between numbers and millions.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 20:40, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Massachusetts until " comma after Mass. — The current phrasing is correct. A prepositional phrase that comes after an independent clause requires no comma. For example "I live in a house." There is no need for a comma before "in."--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 22:47, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• " Lee opts to remain in Manchester-by-the-Sea," probably need to note earlier that this is where Joe was.—I was unable to find a place to mention MBTS earlier in the plot summary, since neither the hospital nor the funeral home are in that town. However, I made a clarification that the home where Patrick and Lee lives is there.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 22:47, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• " Patrick's uncle." etc, these are sentence fragments so they don't need a period.—Agreed and  Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 22:52, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• Non-breaking space before ellipsis per MOS:ELLIPSIS.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 22:55, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "would not have a" did, not would.—This usage is correct. "Would," in this case, is the past tense of "will." It is used to refer to a future event in relation to a past date. From the standpoint of September 8, 2014 (when work on the film began) his next break (a future event at the time) would end up being a year away.
• "The Finest Hours" turns out that was a 2016 movie.—I wasn't sure what you were correcting here. but The Finest Hour is only mentioned once in the article, to say that Affleck was filming the movie in December 2014, which is a true statement.
• "joined" is somewhat overused for those members who were added to the cast.—Fixed this.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Matt Damon and John Krasinski had" both overlinked.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "of Manchester-by-the-Sea, Massachusetts.[22] " also overilnked.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Filming took place... Filming wrapped" repetitive.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "whale watching among other whale watchers." likewise.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Initially, Gigi Pritzker was set..." this "produce", "finance", "through [...] company" is highly repetitive.—Fixed.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The film was screened at the Telluride Film Festival in September 2016.[33] The Toronto International Film Festival screened the film on September 13, 2016.[34][35" short clunky, consider elegant merging.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 23:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
• "May 8, 2017 and " comma after year.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Manchester by the Sea grossed..." merge this single-sentence para with the next one.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• "finishing 6th at" ranking sixth?—Finishing is more common, but I did spell out sixth, which is appropriate since it's a number less than 10.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• "received immense critical acclaim" remove "immense".—Agreed.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Manchester by the Sea received six nominations..." -> "The film received..."— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• "with Jezebel" italics, like our article?—The manual of style is ambivalent about italicizing websites, but I have no problem with it.  Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• Check those ellipsis non-breakers!
• Variety is overlinked.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Georg Friedrich Händel" presumably formatted per the ref, we have no h and no diacritic on our article. And it's overlinked in this table.—The Wikipedia article's title is the Anglicized version of his name (a version which is highly contested on the talk pages and not used anywhere is Wikipedia), but even that article acknowledges his birth name, contains a copy of his birth certificate with the German spelling, and uses both spellings. In this article, is overlinked, though, so I fixed that.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• Some odd SHOUTING in the refs, e.g. JANUARY 21.—I fixed this. I didn't see any others, but if you find another, let me know, and I will fix that as well.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC) I kept looking and fixed them all, I think.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:55, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
• Also in titles, e.g. ref 70.— Done--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)

Otherwise a really excellent article. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, thank you for the chance to hopefully improve it further, onwards and upwards to FAC perhaps? On hold until we sort this trivia out. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 20:23, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man:Thank you so much for this very thorough review. I really appreciate you taking the time to look over the article. If you catch anything else, let me know and I'll try to attend to it. Stay safe!--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 00:29, 21 April 2020 (UTC)

Delighted to pass this to GA. Wouldn't be surprised at all to see it at FAC...!! Great work. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:13, 21 April 2020 (UTC)