Talk:Malacca City/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:32, 3 June 2016 (UTC)

Happy to take this up. Will post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:32, 3 June 2016 (UTC)

General

• A lot of duplicate links. You can remove them yourself using this tool.
• Convert templates are needed at a number of places.
• No dablinks, no copyvio detected.
• There is no problem with the content itself, but I think the article should have gone to the GOCE first. At several places I feel the prose is not of GA standard, and it might make more sense to review this after a copyeditor has tried their best to improve the prose and presentation. Corinne, what are your thoughts on this?
• Nevertheless, I will try to comment on points other than prose for now. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 16:30, 4 June 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Per WP:MOSLEAD, the lead should not contain too many pronunciation keys as they might look like clutter. You always have the infobox for that purpose.
• It is one of the Malaysian oldest cities "oldest Malaysian cities" Y
• with the other being Alor Setar and George Town "after Alor Setar and George Town" (if Alor Setar is the oldest)  Not done — Based on the List of oldest continuously inhabited cities, seems Malacca is the oldest.
• Presently the lead covers only history. It must cover all the important aspects of the article and be 3 to 4 paras long — Maybe this Cerevisae can help. :D  Done Cerevisae (talk) 12:03, 7 June 2016 (UTC)

Etymology

• that is now the city Say "Malacca City" instead of "the city" when you begin the article Y
• Melaka tree doesn't need italics Y
• Introduce Parameswara Y

Capital city

• representing one parliamentary constituency in the city: Kota Melaka (P.138) Add a note on what "P." stands for Y
• The current mayor is Datuk Zainal Hussin Refrain from wording like "current" and "recent". Mention the year you are talking about. There is a "when?" tag related to this Y

Geography

• Sources for the 2nd para?

Climate

• A large part appears unsourced. Perhaps Ssbbplayer would be able to help?

• Sainsf I saw it too. I added a primary source for the Köppen climate classification statement. I will try to find other sources if I have the time. Ssbbplayer (talk) 00:23, 5 June 2016 (UTC)

Ethnicity and religion

• Unsourced parts

Economy

• Can we have a quantitative perspective on this, for example the recent GDP data? See Sarawak for example.

Culture and leisure

• There are some unsourced parts.

I will stop here for the moment and return later. @Molecule Extraction:, @Cerevisae: Hi, would you like to help here? Herman Jaka appears to be absent since 24 May. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 16:30, 4 June 2016 (UTC)

Hi Sainsf, just to noted that I have fix some of the issues. :) Molecule Extraction (talk) 11:36, 6 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for your help Molecule Extraction. I and Corinne discussed this article on my talk page. Corinne will be copyediting the article as far as she can, and we here will try to fix other issues. But if the nominator does not respond by 11 June, we will have to fail this, but improvements can keep happening. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:09, 6 June 2016 (UTC)

Closing note: Per the discussions above, I have tried to review this article as far as I could. The main problems here are that the nominator has been absent for more than a week after this review began and we have no idea when they will return. Secondly, the prose needs copyediting so that one can clearly understand what it means and then review it. I have enlisted issues unrelated to the prose, many of which the kind volunteer editors have tried to resolve. But at the moment I will have to fail this nomination due to inactivity on the part of the nominator. I hope the article is improved and renominated soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:45, 12 June 2016 (UTC)