Talk:Mal Benning/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by EchetusXe in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:14, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Avoid single-sentence paras.
- The end of the first sentence and beginning of the second sentence are somewhat repetitive, about his position.
- Removed the first instance.--EchetusXe 09:32, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- "moved to left-back" link that position first time in main body.
- "joined Southern League club" maybe clarify this was non-League?
- We have an article about professional football I think which could be linked.
- "he was offered his first professional contract " vs "signed his first professional deal" so did he reject the first offer?
- That's strange, we'll go with the BBC source.--EchetusXe 09:32, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- " the 2012–13 season" put season inside the pipe.
- "15 starts and three" 15/3 or fifteen/three.
- "as the "Stags" posted" that nickname is not explained nor intuitive.
- "was sent off in" link.
- "newly appointed" hyphen.
- "2018–19 season" season inside pipe.
- "in fourth-place" no hyphen.
- "the play-offs despite" link specific.
- "converting his penalty" link.
- No need to link Mexico.
- " the 2019–20 season" season inside pipe.
- "21st on points per game" find a good link for PPG.
- Did the closest I could find.--EchetusXe 09:32, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- "the 2020–21 season" season inside pipe.
- "represent India in August" perhaps "the India national team"?
- "attacking left-back, who is also " overlinked although to a different target.
- Scorelines in ref titles should use en-dash, not hyphen.
That's about all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:24, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- OKay thank you, I have addressed those points.--EchetusXe 09:32, 1 September 2021 (UTC)