Talk:MTV Unplugged +3/GA1

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Reviewer: Sauloviegas (talk • contribs • count) 15:58, 14 September 2011 (UTC)

First look through

Infobox

• The release date is not sourced anywhere in the article.

Fixed the date and added source. Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• organised -> organized
• 'as well as help shun critics who deemed Carey a possible studio artist' What?
• 'In an attempt to prove Carey's live vocals were not derived from studio synthesizers, the performance earned generally positive review from music critics. They praised Carey's live vocal ability, and felt the EP and video helped showcase her talent.' You talked about a view of critics on Carey before (on the phrase above) in the lead. Try to merged them, since they both refer to the performance.

Done. By the way, I removed the part: "as well as help shun critics who deemed Carey a possible studio artist". What it means is that the show was organized to show critics that Carey is not just some studio artist and that she can really sing. Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Background

• MTV Unplugged -> MTV Unplugged
• 'The show's purpose was to present name artists'. To present name artists?

Fixed. Name --> well-known. Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Synopsis

• 'Directed by Larry Jordan, who previously worked with Carey on the music video for "Someday".' -> 'It was directed by Larry Jordan, who previously worked with Carey on the music video for "Someday" (1990).'
• 'The show began with the song "Emotions" Carey entered the studio dressed in a black jacket and matching pants and boots.' -> 'The show began with the song "Emotions" (1991), after Carey entered the studio dressed in a black jacket and matching pants and boots.'
• 'The next song on the set-list was "If It's Over"' -> 'The next song on the set-list was "If It's Over" (1991)'
• 'Once again, as Carey began "Vision of Love"' -> 'Once again, as Carey began "Vision of Love" (1990)'
• '"Make It Happen"' -> '"Make It Happen" (1992)'
• '"Can't Let Go"' -> '"Can't Let Go" (1991)'

All done. Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Release

• Italicize every MTV Unplugged.

Done. Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Reception

Critical response

• Critical reception -> Critical response
• 'Additionally, they felt Carey's performance of "I'll Be There" was "killer" and concluded their review'. Aren't you refering to the Entertainment Weekly review? Why they?

Well, the writer is unknown and so is their gender. So, we refer using "they". Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

I see. Ok, then. :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:12, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Amazing work. I love Carey's version of "I'll Be There". - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 13:37, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

I thank you on behalf of Nathan. I like "I'll Be There" too. Novice7 (talk) 14:38, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

You're welcome! Passing. :) - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 23:12, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

Wow, thanks. Novice7 (talk) 04:38, 2 October 2011 (UTC)