Talk:LoveStoned/GA1

GA Review

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Review

Hey, I'm reviewing the article. Best. — R² 00:33, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Lead

• "including reaching" - bad wording.
  • Removed "reaching".
    • Good

Background

• Redundant use of the word "also".
  • Got it.
• "in regards of the unexpected switch" - bad wording.
• "the back story behind the song" - bad wording.
  • Do you have suggestions for both?
    • Done

Reception

• "The song received positive reception" - Not needed, the reader can make up their own minds from the reviews presented.
• "upon release it was downloaded 39,000 times" - Should go in the chart performance section
  • Done [on both].
    • Good

Chart performance

• "The track reached the top 10 in less than 7 European countries" - Odd way of putting it.
  • Do I remove it?
• Not sure why you need to say "position" all the time, remove a few.
  • I think I got it.
• Any info on certifications/sales anywhere?
  • Nope, no certifications.
    • All good.

Music vid

• "The video was directed by Robert Hales" - Stubby, join to another sentence.
  • I think I know what you mean, but I want to be sure.
    • Done, I aloo removed the attribution of the newspaper because it's hardly a controversial issue.

Charts

• There are several unsourced charts on there, you should be able to find situations.
  • Done.

References

• The formatting of the references section is not ideal. Publishers are linked on ever occasion pretty much. Publishers only need wikilinking once, on the first ref number they appear in. Some publishing dates do not have brackets over them.
  • Done. Also, I have cite ref and cite news in the article.

Generally a nice piece of work. These issues shouldn't take long to address. I have the page watchlisted BTW. When this is done I'll give it a second read through. — R² 18:23, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I hope I've addressed your concerns. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:21, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

OK, it's looking real good. Tomorrow I'll give the prose another read over though. — R² 00:04, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

Final comments

• Regarding "The song includes a string section" of the lead, which part of the song is this in, or is it in both parts?
  • Its in both parts.

OK, well the article is good now, so it passes :) — R² 14:42, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. ;) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 14:48, 17 June 2009 (UTC)