Talk:Los Pollos Hermanos/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Prisencolin in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
Happy to take this :) I will post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
Really well-written and interesting read. Just a few points:
- The lead could be expanded by a few more lines to include some more important details from Real life history section like the 10% revenue increase.
- Link Twisters on first mention in the main text (after lead)
- Starting with 'in 201x' makes the section look like a list. You can reword it a bit and combine the events in 2013–15 into one para to make it look more interesting. The events need not be related, like the revenue increase and the mugshot thing, but you can connect them as events happening 'a year before/later'. Or at least don't let the 'in 201x' part appear monotonously right at the start of every line.
restaurant's logo was the subject of a lawsuit brought by Humberto Puentes-Segura, the artist who created it
Should the logo designer not be mentioned independently somewhere in the article? I think he is that significant for the topic- Link Sony
On April 11-12
endash needed
Sources and citations look good, no duplinks or dablinks, external links ok. Rest looks fine to me. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 14:21, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Sainsf: apologies for the late reply and thanks for reviewing this. I believe I and other editors have addressed all of the points you raised.--Prisencolin (talk) 06:13, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
- I saw the article Prisencolin, the changes (especially the new pic) look good. But I am not sure the points other than the third one have been properly addressed (Sony needs to be linked at the first mention in the main text). Can you clarify what you plan to do about them? Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:23, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Sainsf: Sony has now been linked. I didn't want to include a precise figure about Twisters revenue in 2013 because it seemed somewhat out of context.--Prisencolin (talk) 03:27, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
- I saw the article Prisencolin, the changes (especially the new pic) look good. But I am not sure the points other than the third one have been properly addressed (Sony needs to be linked at the first mention in the main text). Can you clarify what you plan to do about them? Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:23, 22 April 2020 (UTC)