Talk:London Hughes: To Catch a D*ck/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 00:44, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
- Add a short description to the top of the article.
- "released in December 2020" - be specific for the lead.
- Yes. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 21:01, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
- "Netflix Is a Joke" → "Netflix Is A Joke" (actual title)
- "in order to" → "to" (less wordy)
- "Hughes landed a role in Netflix's History of Swear Words (January 2021) while waiting to film To Catch a D*ck: she said that "Now that Netflix knew about my show ... they were like, 'Well, maybe London could talk about dick on this'". The fourth episode of the series, "D**k", is about the word dick." - Try merging the sentences → "While waiting to film To Catch a D*ck, Hughes made an appearance in Netflix's History of Swear Words (January 2021); the fourth episode, in which she appeared, is about the word dick."
- Hmm, the meaning I'm trying to get across is quite nuanced. They approached her for History of Swear Words thinking the episode about the word dick would be perfect for her (because of this special's title and themes), but she appears in every episode of the series. How about:
While waiting to film To Catch a D*ck, Hughes landed a role in Netflix's History of Swear Words, the fourth episode of which is about the word dick; she appears in all six episodes, which were released in January 2021.
— Bilorv (talk) 21:00, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
- Hmm, the meaning I'm trying to get across is quite nuanced. They approached her for History of Swear Words thinking the episode about the word dick would be perfect for her (because of this special's title and themes), but she appears in every episode of the series. How about:
- This works. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 21:03, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
- "moved to the seaside aged 14" - reword (did you mean "at the age of 14"?)
- "British Comedy Guide, who" → "British Comedy Guide, which" (company)
- Run the automatic archiving tool.
- Sort categories in alphabetical order.
- Ping when done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 19:21, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks, Some Dude From North Carolina, all done or replied to. — Bilorv (talk) 21:00, 16 July 2021 (UTC)