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Hello! Peer-reviewed your article today! Anypaver124 (talk) 17:10, 7 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment edit

  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 22 January 2021 and 26 April 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Julsy2002, Lps2021. Peer reviewers: Raquellegher, KhushiRamnani, Anypaver124, Alexflores1.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 00:14, 18 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Prof D Feedback edit

Hi Julsy2002 and Lps2021 great start here! A few notes.

  • in the lead, put both citations at the end of the sentence. This is common for Wiki.
  • don't include age as this changes over time...
  • proof for typos
  • organize the activism section with subheadings and consolidate the Peace of Mind info into one section. the last two mini paragraphs in this section would fit better in early life and Education section
  • format award section as bullet point list
  • if there are websites connected to her activism these can be included in an additional "See Also" section -- it's acceptable to put sources like these in there as a useful resource
  • in general see if any more hyperlinking is possible. It's ok if not.

otherwise great work!! --Liliput000 (talk) 12:13, 12 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review edit

Hey! I have added my comments in the peer review section so it should be available now! I really enjoyed reading your article, look forward to reading the finalized version!