Talk:Loch Henry/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 22:55, 16 February 2024 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	I reviewed the matches of 7% or more found using Earwig's Copyvio Detector. No issues; matches were titles, attributed quotes, or examples acceptable per WP:LIMITED such as "the second episode of the" and "Davis's mother Janet (Monica Dolan)". No issues found during spot checks.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Reflects sources.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Suitable FUR for the poster. The other images are CC or PD.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Images are relevant. Captions are fine.
	7. Overall assessment.

• Film Music Reporter has been mentioned a few times at RSN. I don't think there's a clear consensus at Wikipedia:Reliable_sources/Noticeboard/Archive_387#Film_Music_Reporter_-_Reliability but it would probably be better to use a replacement, if possible.
  • Replaced. — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
• The other sources all seem fine.
• Plot summary seems fine, from my recollection of the episode.
• Spot check on "Historical technology is key to the episode, such as the VHS recordings of Bergerac " - no issues. (I was hoping this could be expanded on, but there's not enough in the source to allow that)
• Spot check on "Brooker observed that the "texture of old media" had become fetishised" - no issues. I'm not sure "observed" is quite right as it's not an objective assessment.
  • Changed to "remarked". — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
• Spot check on "Kirsty Wark presents Blenkins's character with a BAFTA;" - not verified by the archived copy of the cited source
  • Bad copy-and-paste: I meant to cite the i review of "Loch Henry", not the "Joan Is Awful" one, but also got the two reviewers (both named Emily) mixed up. (Wark is also mentioned here and here and possibly it's evident in the credits.) — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
• Spot check on "Weruche Opia also plays herself at a BAFTA event" - no issues. (Maybe add a comma after "herself"?)
  • Comma added. — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
• Spot check on "Portman said he had "never laughed out loud so much" when reading a script" - source qualifies this with "..on first reading"
  • Now "when first reading". — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
• Spot check on "As she still owned a VHS, her knowledge of its features was useful on set." - self-reported, but, I think, uncontroversial enough that it doesn't need to be qualified in the text, so no issues
• Spot checks on "according to i's Emily Bootle, it reveals the genre as "pointless" and "empty"" and "The characters get into a car crash because they are distracted by singing a comedy song about Adair torturing his victims" - not verified by the archived copy of the cited source, please check all the citations currently to Bootle's i article.
  • As above. — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)
• Spot check on "Tourists in the Lochside Inn wear identical masks as costumes" - no issues.
• I'm not really sure if "deserted" is quite the right word in the plot sumamry and lead; to me it implies "completely empty of people". Isn't the town something like "largely deserted"?
  • Now "run-down" after a long consideration of adjectives ("desolate", "isolated", "ruined" etc.). — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)

Great work, Bilorv. I couldn't find much to suggest on this one. Placing it on hold. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:37, 18 February 2024 (UTC)

Thanks again for the review, BennyOnTheLoose! I think I've addressed all these points. — Bilorv (talk) 19:14, 19 February 2024 (UTC)

I'm satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria, so I'm passing it. thanks! Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 19:24, 19 February 2024 (UTC)

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