Edit requests to update and improve grammar, syntax and make corrections

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Hi, this is Eloise from Moonbug Entertainment. I have several edit requests to improve and update the article.

  1. In the interests of clarity and proper English I propose to replace the current introductory paragraph with the following: Little Baby Bum (also known as LBB and LittleBabyBum) is a British children’s YouTube show which specializes in 3D animated videos of both traditional nursery rhymes and original children's songs. It was acquired by Moonbug Entertainment in 2018. Beginning in 2011 UK-based Derek Holder and his wife, Cannis Holder,[1] designed videos based on classic nursery rhymes, but with a modern aesthetic.[2] Little Baby Bum is also available in Spanish, Brazilian Portuguese, Italian, Russian, Polish, German, French, Chinese and Japanese.[3]
  2. Please delete the last sentence in the introduction; there is no source, and the show LBB Junior is no longer in production.
  3. In the History section, in the first sentence, after the first words "Little Baby Bum" please add "was created to support kids' development of language through the means of song and repetition."
  4. The second sentence in the first paragraph of the History section should read: Derek and Cannis uploaded their first video, Twinkle, Twinkle... Everything else is fine.
  5. Please replace the second paragraph of the History second with the following: Little Baby Bum's popularity increased after the release of its 2nd compilation of videos which was approximately one hour long. To create a one-hour-long video they combined individual videos into long-form videos. The rationale behind this change was so that “parents wouldn't have to keep pressing the play button after each video had finished." (Maintain the source that is there now.)
  6. Replace the third paragraph with the following: The OpenSlate company published a list of YouTube’s 10 most profitable channels of 2014, ranking Little Baby Bum in 4th place with 270 million views and $3.46 million in earnings. (Maintain the source that is there now.)
  7. Under the third paragraph in the History section please add the following sentence and source: In June 2018, LBB announced an upcoming live show tour in 30 cities throughout the UK.[4]
  8. Please change the next paragraph to the following: In September 2018, Little Baby Bum was bought by Moonbug Entertainment for an undisclosed sum. By the time of the purchase, LBB had accumulated 16 million subscribers and about 23 billion views across Netflix, Amazon, and YouTube. [5] (Also leave the source that is there now.)
  9. Add the following new sentence to the end of the History section: In April 2020, Moonbug signed a deal with Chinese video platform Xigua Video, to host the show on its platform in China. [6][7]
  10. Please replace the first paragraph in the Rankings section with the following: Since 2014 when the video was posted, Little Baby Bum's 54-minute compilation video of Wheels On The Bus | Plus Lots More Nursery Rhymes | 54 Minutes Compilation has had 2.3 billion views and was YouTube's 39th most viewed video of all time. At that time, this video was the most-watched video of all time on YouTube, surpassing Psy's Gangnam Style, and was the first non-music video to reach 1 billion views. (Please keep all the sources that are currently there.)
  11. Replace the last sentence in the Rankings section with the following, retaining the source that is there now: As of April 2016, Wheels On The Bus had attracted over 1.33 billion views. It was officially recognized as the number one educational video by Guinness World Records in 2017.
  12. In the Merchandise section there are just a few small grammar issues. Please change "or" to "and" here: "...like Incy Wincy Spider and Baa Baa Black Sheep." Also change "This deal has been signed with..." to "The deal was signed with Commonwealth..."
  13. There is a problem with the last source on the page. Delete the reference that is there now (which is citing a named reference which for some reason is no longer on the page) and replace it with this reference: [8]

References

  1. ^ "Posts | The Baby Spot". TheBabySpot.ca. 2014-01-27. Retrieved 2018-07-19.
  2. ^ Cite error: The named reference guardian1 was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  3. ^ "Publishing is the next chapter for YouTube's Little Baby Bum". Retrieved 2021-04-22.
  4. ^ "Publishing is the next chapter for YouTube's Little Baby Bum". Retrieved 2021-04-22.
  5. ^ "Publishing is the next chapter for YouTube's Little Baby Bum". Retrieved 2021-04-22.
  6. ^ Moonbug. "Moonbug Enters China Through Strategic Partnership with Xigua Video". www.prnewswire.co.uk. Retrieved 2021-04-22.
  7. ^ "Moonbug, Xigua Team for China Content". licenseglobal.com. 2020-04-24. Retrieved 2021-04-22.
  8. ^ "Publishing is the next chapter for YouTube's Little Baby Bum". Retrieved 2021-04-22.

I am pinging Soap and BengkelBerkah05 who have been so helpful in the past. All your help is very much appreciated. Eloise Moonbug (talk) 14:35, 22 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

Okay, I think I was able to get it exactly the way you intended it. Please let me know if there are any other issues. All the best, Soap 17:28, 22 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

Edits to the Introduction, update ranking and merchandise sections

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Hi, this is Eloise. Before I ask for a few more edits I would like to sincerely thank Soap for all the help he has provided in improving this article. I want you to know it is much appreciated, even if it took a bit longer than it should have to acknowledge.

  1. In order to improve and update the Introduction I request that the following content replace the introduction that is there now. It is almost exactly the same, with only a few additions and with more concise language. Little Baby Bum (also known as LBB and LittleBabyBum) is a British children’s animated series created in 2011 by UK-based Derek Holder and his wife, Cannis Holder.[1] The show revolves around Mia, a young girl, her family, peers and a group of anthropomorphic characters. The format of the show is 3D animated videos of both traditional nursery rhymes and original children's songs, but with a modern aesthetic,[2] supporting child development of language through song and repetition. It was acquired by Moonbug Entertainment in 2018. The show is available on YouTube,[3] BBC iPlayer,[4][5] and distributed across SVOD[6] and AVOD players,[7] and over 40 platforms including Netflix, Amazon Prime, and Hulu.[8] Little Baby Bum is available in English, Spanish, Brazilian Portuguese, Italian, Russian, Polish, German, French, Chinese and Japanese.[9]
  2. Please take out the first sentence from the History section, because it is now found in the introduction, where it makes more logical sense. To be clear, the sentence to take out is "Little Baby Bum was created to support kids' development of language through the means of song and repetition."
  3. Please add these two sentences to the end of the Rankings section:
    • As of 2018 Little Baby Bum was the world's tenth-largest YouTube channel with 16.5 million subscribers.[10]
    • In 2020 the show attracted over 1.5 billion monthly views and over 80 million subscribers.[8]
  4. In the Merchandise section, please remove the following sentence since it is completely outdated and the book company no longer even exists: "Parragon Books have signed a multiple book deal with the initial release dates for end of 2016."
  5. Please add the following sentence with a source to the end of the Merchandise section: Little Baby Bum signed a toy master agreement with MGA Entertainment in August 2020 in which MGAE is the worldwide licensing agent for merchandise based on the animated show.[8]

References

  1. ^ "Posts | The Baby Spot". TheBabySpot.ca. 2014-01-27. Retrieved 2018-07-19.
  2. ^ "Litle Baby Bum App Review | The Baby Spot Parenting Magazine". TheBabySpot.ca. 2014-01-27. Retrieved 2021-06-15.
  3. ^ Shimpach, Shawn, ed. (2020). The Routledge Companion to Global Television. New York, NY: Routledge. ISBN 978-1-138-72434-1.
  4. ^ "Little Baby Bum launches on BBC iPlayer creating wider platform for Little Tikes range". Toy World Magazine | The business magazine with a passion for toys. 2021-06-14. Retrieved 2021-06-17.
  5. ^ "Little Tikes expresses excitement over Little Baby Bum's arrival on BBC iPlayer". ToyNews. Retrieved 2021-06-17.
  6. ^ "TBI Weekly: Making a success of YouTube-first content". TBI Vision. 2021-03-26. Retrieved 2021-06-15.
  7. ^ "First kids VOD service launches on Freeview". Digital TV Europe. 2016-07-07. Retrieved 2021-06-15.
  8. ^ a b c "MGA Entertainment named worldwide licensing agent for Little Baby Bum". ToyNews. Retrieved 2021-06-15.
  9. ^ "Publishing is the next chapter for YouTube's Little Baby Bum". Retrieved 2021-04-22.
  10. ^ "The story behind the sale of the world's 10th largest Youtube channel". Daily EN. Retrieved 2021-06-15.

Thanks so much for all your help.Eloise Moonbug (talk) 14:08, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

It appears that User:Soap took care of this so I've changed the banner to "accepted" so that this gets removed from the backlog. CapitalSasha ~ talk 02:44, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply