Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 27 August 2018 and 15 December 2018. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Juliasouf. Peer reviewers: Daileymn.

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Morgan's feedback

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Add more to the lead section about Bray. Also the first link takes you to a login page, recite manually. Daileymn (talk) 17:39, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Kile's Feedback

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Think of ways to rewrite the first sentence, "Linda did service.." doesn't sound right. Maybe switch to Captain Bray served in the United States Army from .. to .. Divide the Service section into multiple different subheadings and make service a main heading. This will allow you to better organize the information and better inform as to where all she served and in what units. Other than that it looks good just work on finishing the article.CheeseBurgerDude79 (talk) 19:08, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Deven's Feedback

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The article from what I see is quite well structured, but I think more sources and maybe more information on the woman would be beneficial. PowersD (talk) 19:10, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Minor change

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I added a Wikipedia link for the US Army. Daileymn (talk) 19:12, 31 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Small Change

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Got rid of some unnecessary language in order to make the article sound less biased.CheeseBurgerDude79 (talk) 19:16, 31 October 2018 (UTC)Reply