Talk:Lights (BTS song)/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 06:27, 14 July 2020 (UTC)Reply


Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Coming later today --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:27, 14 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Kyle Peake, Good to work with you again, thank you for taking up this review! I shall address the comments now. --Ashleyyoursmile! 17:55, 14 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Why is there no referencing of the B-side in the infobox?
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  • "It was released as a double" → "The song was released as a double"
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  • "It marked the band's first original" → "This marked the band's first original"
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  • ""Lights" was written by Sunny Boy, Yohei and" → "The song was written by Sunny Boy, Yohei, and"
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  • "also handling production." → "solely handling production."
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  • "featuring a heavy" → "featuring a" since this is too much info for the lead
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  • "its lyrics describe BTS" → "the lyrics describe BTS"
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  • "success in Japan. It debuted" → "success in Japan, debuting"
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  • "The single also peaked at number one on" → "The song also peaked at the summit of"
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  • "single of 2019 in Japan. The single" → "single of 2019 in Japan and"
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  • Following targets seem like overlinking; only use one
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  • "only one month after its release," → "only a month after release,"
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  • "It was later awarded as one" → "The song was later awarded as one"
  •   Not done The song was not awarded as one of the best singles but the single album was, as mentioned in the prose.
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  • "The video was met with a positive reception..." remove this sentence since there are not enough reviews to back it up
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  • "It was the band's first Japanese single" → "The song was BTS' first Japanese single"
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  • "BTS performed the song live" → "The band performed "Lights" live"
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Background and release

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  • Retitle to Background and composition; I will provide further instructions relevant to this
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  • Remove wikilink on extended play
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  • "marked the band's first original" → "marked BTS' first original"
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  • "receive a music video after" → "receive a music video, after" with the appropriate wikilink
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  • "It was mixed by D.O.I," → "The song was mixed by D.O.I,"
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  • Start a new para after this sentence
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  • "It is an" → ""Lights" is an"
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  • "at a tempo of 99 beats per minutes," → "with a tempo of 99 beats per minute,"
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  • The word light should not be in speech marks
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  • The following para should be the beginning of the following section instead
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  • Remove wikilink on the album and the release year brackets
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  • "It was released as a" → "The song was released as a"
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  • "by the same record label," → "through the aforementioned record label,"
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  • "different limited editions:" → "different limited editions;"
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  • "with a DVD containing" → "with a DVD that contains"
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  • "the music video of" → "the music video for"
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  • "while the final edition C contains" → "while C contains" since edition is stated earlier in this sentence
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Reception

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  • Retitle to Release and reception, with the para that I asked you to move from the first section as the opening one here
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Critical response and awards

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  • Remove this sub-section; instead have it as the second para of the section
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  • "received generally favourable reviews" → "was met with generally favourable reviews"
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  • "complimented the band's" → "complimented BTS'"
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  • "also shared a similar view," → "shared a similar view,"
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  • Are you sure the awards should be in speech marks?
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  • "received the "Song of the Year by Download (Asia)" award" → "was awarded "Song of the Year by Download (Asia)"" whether or not speech marks are kept
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  • Remove the table as that is only two awards from one ceremony
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Commercial performance

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  • This can be its own section, directly below the Release and reception one
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  • "selling over 467,000 copies." → "selling 467,107 copies." since it is better to report exact stats when they are known
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  • "by the band's previous" → "by their previous"
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  • Spacing should be next to the slash in the single album title for consistency
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  • "454,829 copies" claim does not appear to be backed up
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  • "crossed one million copies" → "crossed 1,000,000 copies"
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  • The claim that this was the first time a foreign artist achieved a million shipments is false, since it is the first time Dion 24 years ago; reword accordingly
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  • "maintained its number one spot" → "remained at number one on"
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  • Are you sure they are "copies" or "physical copies"? Don't change if the latter is indeed correct...
  •   Done Yes, kept it as it is
  • Remove target on Oricon Weekly Singles Chart
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  • "on the chart issue dated" → "for the chart issue dated"
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  • [19] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [20][21]
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  • "At year end," → "For the year end chart,"
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  • Mention how many places it rose by maybe?
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  • "of July 22," → "of July 22, 2019."
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  • "before dropping to number 16..." remove this and [26] since it is violating WP:CHARTS
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  •   Done is this because of MOS:NUM?
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  • Keep the target the same but rename the chart to US World Digital Songs
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  • Wikilink should be on the record chart part of the words instead, but don't change the actual prose
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Music video and promotion

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  • Remove wikilink on music video
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  • "released on the same platform" → "released via the same platform"
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  • "of a film called" → "of a film titled"
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  • "In following scene," → "In the following scene," though this sentence does not appear to be properly backed up
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  • "In some of these scenes," → "In some of the scenes,"
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  • "the movie featuring themselves on screen." → "the film, which features themselves, on screen."
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  • "of time and space"," → "of time and space,""
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  • "as they interact" → "while they interact"
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  • Does not appear to be backed up that Suga was rapping
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  • "while they float around" → "while the particles float around"
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  • "In her review for Celebmix, Ellie Nicholas called the video" → "In her review for CelebMix, Ellie Nicholas called the music video"
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  • "that "matches the" → "that it "matches the"
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  • "similar sentiments and labelled the clip" → "similar sentiments, labeling the clip"
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  • The source does not say when in November 2019 the live performance was
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  • "as a part of their fifth Japanese fan-meeting" → "as part of their fifth Japanese fan-meeting"
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  • The source does not say that there was a performance on December 14 as well as 15
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Track listings and formats

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  • Retitle to Track listings
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  • Cite [9] in place of [4]
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  • Why is "hitman" bang not capitalised on the second mention?
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  • "Boys with Luv" and "Idol" should not be targeted after their respective first times in this section
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  • Where is Limited Edition C?
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Credits and personnel

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  • Good

Charts

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Weekly charts

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  •   Done
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Year-end charts

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  • Japan (Hot 100) → Japan Hot 100 (Billboard)
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Certifications

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  • Good

Release history

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  • Add the Version col, citing the first two as Original version and I will explain further below
  •   Done I have named the col as Edition, cited the first one as Regular instead of Original, since the source mentions Regular
  • Refs should be centered
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  • Add streaming next to digital download with the target
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  • The first CD + DVD release should be named as Limited Edition A under version, while add Limited Edition B appropriately to the table and C if you can
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See also

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  • Good

References

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  • Sweet job with the archiving
  • Copyvio score looks amazing at 10.7%!
  • Remove Variety Staff from refs 1 and 29
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  • Citations regarding the digital release of "Lights / Boy with Luv" by BTS in various countries → Citations regarding the digital release of "Lights / Boy with Luv" by BTS in various countries: on ref 9, plus some of the citations for foreign languages are not titled appropriately so fix that
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  • Cite Idolator as publisher instead for ref 11
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  • OSENOsen on ref 18
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  • Lights/Boy with Luv Cumulative sales: → "Lights / Boy with Luv" Cumulative sales: on ref 21
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  • Cite Oricon News as publisher instead for ref 31
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  • Celebmix → CelebMix on ref 40
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Final comments and verdict

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  • DEEPPINK I did some copyediting but some issues still need fixing, which instructions will be provided for above. Also, only the refs should be centered in the release history table, plus are you sure hlist can't be replaced with bullet points under Track listings? --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:31, 17 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Final comments and verdict

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  • Ashleyyoursmile I did some copyediting but some issues still need fixing, which instructions will be provided for above. Also, only the refs should be centered in the release history table, plus are you sure hlist can't be replaced with bullet points under Track listings? --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:31, 17 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
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