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Peer Review (Olivia Vogt)

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1) Are all the parts there?

It appears that all necessary sections are here. Consider a subheading for "professional life." It makes sense to include education in the Background but maybe her work after getting her degrees needs a new section. Also consider making and "Awards and Honors" section, or something like it, since you have so much good info here about her recognition!

2) Is the opening "hook" strong?

Yes, the relevance of the scholar is immediately apparent. Good job putting that first! One sentence that seems a bit off in the intro: "Her work is focused on relationships like romantic, marital, and friendships." It seems odd that the list goes adjective, adjective, noun. Maybe "Her work is focused on friendships, marriages, and other relationships."

3) How's the style? (spelling, grammar, clear sentences, correct verb tense.

It seems very professional and clean. Should there be citations in the text? If so, make sure you get those in there. There is a lot of good info in here. A few little typos I caught:

At the beginning of Scholarly Work: "Dr. Baxter’s has dedicated her work "....I think the "'s" is left over from a different thought here.

Right after that: "Relational Dialectics Theory, which was created by herself and Barbara Montgomery, and has been mentioned in books, scholarly journals, and received awards." I think it's "created by Baxter and Barbara Montgomery," but don't quote me on that. :)

Right before you go into the awards: "A study done with Daena Goldsmith that looked at communication in dating couples." This confused me. Is it an unfinished sentence maybe? What is the study, or what did it find/accomplish?

4) Overall impression of the article.

Overall very informative and well-researched! It is obvious you looked closely at Dr. Baxter's history and scholarly work to get this article to where it is.

Great feedback from Olivia! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aburnett412 (talkcontribs) 02:16, 26 April 2017 (UTC)Reply