Talk:Leopard/GA1

GA Review

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I'm afraid that there has to be some serious work done to get this article to match the Good article standard. I will have a second look at the article if my main concerns are met.

Things that must be improved:

• The refs 4, 6 and 7 are dead.
• The refs (23 see below), (24 see below), 31, 32, (38 see below) and 46 need information about the publisher (and the author if possible).
• The ADW (ref 23 and 38) is not a reliable source, since "The Animal Diversity Web is an educational resource written largely by and for college students." It has to be replaced.
• Seaworld.org (ref 24) is certainly not a reliable source for infos about leopards, at least it is a self-published source and we do not know about the knowledge of the author.
• I am not convinced that ref 42, 46 and 51 are reliable sources. Why do you think that they are?
• "the number growing from the time of Linnaeus in the 18th century to that of Reginald Pocock in the early 20th." This needs a clarification.
• "Their list as follows:" This list contains 10 subspecies, not 9.
• "given a massive skull that well utilizes powerful jaw muscles." utilizes: very strange wording.
• The chapter on Variant coloration is much too long, especially compared to the quite short chapter about general physical characteristics. I propose to merge some aspects of the paragraph "Most other colour morphs of leopards are known only [...]" (lacks sources!) with the previous paragraph "A pseudo-melanistic leopard has a normal background color, [...]" and to remove all (also unsourced!) paragraphs starting with "In a paper about panthers and ounces of Asia, [...]".
• "It is a powerful swimmer, although, not as strong as some other big cats," A swimmer can be fast and/or enduring, but not strong.
• In References: "Leopards and spots on ears and tail [1]" What?
• The ref 27 contains strange information and needs to be formatted properly.
• "and are capable of carrying animals up to three times their own weight this way." needs a source.
• "Eventually, a fight for reproductive rights may take place." This does not flow with the previous and the next sentence and has to be explained.
• "but infant mortality is high and usually no more than 1–2 cubs survive beyond their infancy." needs a source.
• ", while the sexual difference in range size seemed to be in positive proportion to overall increase.[35]" What? I don't understand the meaning of this.
• "Leopards have adapted to live alongside these other predators by hunting at different times of the day, and by avoiding areas frequented by them." needs a source.
• "though numerous products worldwide have used the name." This needs clarification. What's the meaning of used the name?
• "Leopard domestication has also been recorded [...]" That's not domestication!!!
• The whole Tourism chapter needs sources.
• "most leopards avoid humans." This needs a source, badly.
• "In extreme cases, both in India: a leopard dubbed [...]" Wrong grammar.

Things that should be improved:

• "The species' success in the wild" Probably not the best wording regarding its recent decline of population numbers.
• "Felis pardus was one of the many species described in Linnaeus's 18th-century work, Systema Naturae.[5]" Why is this useful to know? It should most likely be removed.
• "Older taxonomic divisions" According to whom?
• The chapter about general physical characteristcs is very short, at least some information on sensory perception and maybe locomotion should be added.
• "Leopards have been reported to reach 21 years of age in captivity.[18]" This belongs in the "life cycle" chapter.
• "The leopard is primarily a nocturnal creature, and many of its operations are done by night." The second part of the sentence is totally redundant to the well-known word nocturnal.

Fixed Seduisant (talk) 20:14, 23 September 2009 (UTC)

• "The pregnant females find a cave, crevice among boulders, hollow tree, or thicket to give birth and make a den." find a cave: strange wording.
• "Leopards and humans have many relations," have many relations: strange wording.

Content placed elsewhere and offending sentence removed. Seduisant (talk) 23:53, 26 September 2009 (UTC)

Things that could be improved:

• It's always good to have two or three sentences out of the chapters reproduction/life cycle/social structure in the lead.
• Are all of those 10 external links useful for a further understanding of the article?
• "The leopard is also very agile, and can run over sixty kilometers an hour, leap over six metres and jump up to three metres vertically.[24]" Provide imperial units in parentheses.
• "most leopards avoid humans." Why do they avoid humans?
• There should be more information about leopards in mythology and literature.

--Novil Ariandis (talk) 16:05, 4 January 2009 (UTC)