Talk:Len Davies/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:20, 8 March 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Could link "professional" as I suggested in another similar review.
- "in Cardiff he trained" I would put a comma after Cardiff.
- "a reserve until " I'm not 100% sure our friends over the pond know what one of those is.
- "During the game" match (for variety)
- "a goal was draw" goalless?
- "yearsater" I like it, a bit like Newspeak right?
- "at sea.[3][1] " order.
- "Davies began his career.." football career (you mentioned previously that trained as a marine engineer)
- "against England" suitable link?
- "in 1919.[1] He made" merge, that first sentence is very brief.
- "for their tie against" ***tie klaxon*** (just reading comments on my FAC from a Canadian ice hockey fan has reminded me that "tie" means all manner of different things...)
- "in the top tier" link English football league system?
- " a £3,000 offer" inflate?
- "prolific in the Welsh Cup," overlinked.
- "missed penalty" link pen.
- "attempt "There " probably needs some punctuation or some neat way of introducing this quote rather than just a run-on from the prose.
- "In 1927, he was part of the.." I would move the link to the final to where you say final.
- "his one season" maybe "only"
- Link "kit" or people's heads will fall off.
- "Mostyn House School, Parkgate" comma after Parkgate.
- "International goals" table is not sortable (?) so no need to relink things. If (however) you make it sortable, please relink the Home Championships each time.
- Tables need row and col scopes.
That's it for me, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:55, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Thanks for another review. I've implemented all of the changes above. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 09:51, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- All good, so I'm promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 10:06, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Thanks for another review. I've implemented all of the changes above. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 09:51, 11 March 2021 (UTC)