Talk:Lee Guetterman

Latest comment: 3 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Am reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

General edit

  • I believe all uses of the word "majors" should be changed to "major leagues"

Lead edit

  • "Drafted by the Mariners in the in the fourth round of the 1981 Major League Baseball (MLB) Draft," - the text in bold is a repetition
  • "before getting moved to the bullpen due to a loss of control." - loss of control of what?
  • I think the lead could be three paragraphs instead of two; how about making the new paragraph after he became unhappy with his playing time
  • "though he was in the minor leagues until June 30." - add that year to the end of this sentence for clarification

Early life edit

  • "Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958, to Arthur Adam Jr. and Ruth Guetterman.[1][2]" - the first citation can be moved to the comma because it does not mention his parents
  • "Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958," - born on November 22,
  • "where he was coached on the baseball team by former major league pitcher Al Worthington.[4][3]" - refs in numerical order please

First full season, use as a starter (1986–87) edit

  • "16 of his 41 appearances for Seattle" - don't start a sentence with a digit
  • Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article

Emerging as a relief pitcher, closing, leading the Yankees in wins (1988–90) edit

  • "because of an injury to Ron Guidry." - The LA Times said Guidry's injury was to his left elbow
  • "Sure enough, Righetti went on to assume the closer role" - use alternative formal wording in place of the text in bold or delete it
  • Wikilink go-ahead home run to the relevant article

Dissatisfaction with workload, trade to the Mets (1991–92) edit

  • "then earned ones in back-to-back appearances July 1 and 4," - achieved saves in back-to-back appearances on July 1 and 4,
  • "As it turned out," - transpired
  • "in a 2016 interview." - interview with whom?
    • No interviewee is shown in the video, but I don't think that's relevant here - the main point of this sentence is that in 2016, Guetterman thought New York was his favorite place that he had played. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:54, 15 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Various organizations (1993–97) edit

  • "Guetterman was then unemployed for over a month before signing with the Mariners again on August 8." - more than a month
  • "earning the save (his only one of the season) in the victory." - earning him his sole save of the season in the victory
  • "when Tim Davis broke his leg." - The Spokesman-Review says it was his left leg that was broken
  • "Blas Minor then relieved him and retired Rex Hudler to end the inning." - subsequently
  • "finally getting a chance to start again." - reword this sentence slightly

Career statistics and pitching style edit

  • "Guetterman threw a curveball as well.[19][14]" - refs in numerical order please

Personal life edit

  • "due to the preaching and spiritual study he received while a Liberty student. "I made that commitment at Liberty."[19][3]" - refs in numerical order please

References edit

  • Reference 51 should mention the agency

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:06, 15 October 2020 (UTC)Reply