Talk:LeRoy Prinz

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Coretheapple in topic GA Review
Good articleLeRoy Prinz has been listed as one of the Media and drama good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
July 8, 2014Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on March 2, 2014.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that LeRoy Prinz, who staged dances in dozens of Hollywood movies in the 1930s and 1940s, was more an "idea man" than a choreographer, using simple steps and dance routines?


GA Review

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)Reply

I'll do this one. Time to cut the "media and drama" backlog. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)Reply

  • The lead should only be 2 paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
  • It also should be rejigged. Prinz had 3 Oscar nominations; this should be one of the first things mentioned and yet it's not there.
  • Lead should use his middle name
  • "Leroy Jerome Prinz" not LeRoy?
  • ""introducing the American strut step" only needs one "
  • "during World War I" you said this earlier in the paragraph
  • Why does the Career section not mention his three Oscar nominations?
  • His Golden Globe win is also not mentioned
  • Two paragraphs in "Career" are not sourced
  • Any info on his personal life? IMDB says he had a kid named LeRoy Jr.

Overall I think this is close to meeting the GA criteria and will place it on hold. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 21:27, 3 July 2014 (UTC)Reply

  Done Thanks very much for reviewing this. Coretheapple (talk) 13:39, 8 July 2014 (UTC)Reply