Talk:Larry King (30 Rock)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 17:15, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Hi, I am reviewing this article and will add comments below.

Plot

• "giving chaos-inducting thoughts" - what are chaos-inducing thoughts?
  • Added. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 18:02, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

• The various elements of the plot should be keep together. e.g. all the stuff about the taxi driver and the cellphone should be together and not intermixed with other elements. This way the reader can follow each plot line.
  • I think I got it.

• Everything that was revealed on the Larry King Show should be in the same place, where the interview is described.
  • Done, I guess.

Cultural references

• " Liz lies to Kenneth that her phone has a recording of her deceased grandmother singing a lullaby, to which later Kenneth makes her sing the song and him realizing that she was singing the song "99 Luftballons"," - and his realizing? or his realization?
  • "his realization". --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 18:02, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

• " When Jack sees Elisa outside the 30 Rock building, he tells her, "I was about to do the whole run to the airport thing, like Ross did on Friends and Liz Lemon did in real life", a reference to the Friends television character Ross Geller telling Rachel Green his true feelings about her in the show's finale episode "The Last One",[18] and Liz similarly doing it in the season two episode "Sandwich Day", though, decides to be in good terms with her ex-boyfriend, Floyd DeBarber (Jason Sudeikis)." This sentence needs improvement. I would fix it but I don't quite understand it.
  • Jack references that the Ross character did it on Friends, as he went to the airport to tell Rachel he loves her, in order for her not to go to Paris. Liz did it in "Sandwich Day", though, she wanted to make peace with Floyd, after the two got into an argument.

Reception

• " but much preferred the Jack character single and participating in Liz's life." - is this explained somewhere? It seems to come out of left field.
  • Are you referring that this isn't included in the review, or.... Whatever means, I removed "participating in Liz's life" bit. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 18:02, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Otherwise, the article looks pretty good. Xtzou (Talk) 17:15, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 18:02, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: Pass!

Congratulations! Nice work. Xtzou (Talk) 19:46, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:49, 13 April 2010 (UTC)