Talk:Larry (Pokémon)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 01:26, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: 🥒Greenish Pickle!🥒 (🔔) 22:42, 25 April 2024 (UTC)

lead

• Split off the reception information to second paragraph and try to expand the wordings and perhaps remove the citations and transfer them to the reception section, but you have make an opening statement first on reception.

• Since his introduction, Larry has received highly positive critical response, being highlighted as relatable,[1][2] and has been described as a breakout character. I don't see this phrase is a good one, but you can try at least to change perhaps?

Concept

• I assumed there are no sources about his concept that are available, but you candn add info about voice actor [1]. Also, add the vooce actor in the infobox image.

Appearances

• I feel like this section is a bit flimsy. Did he appear in Anime? try to expand if you can.

Reception

• Add an opening statement and relocate the citations from lead into here like I said above.
• "TheGamer Ben Sledge posited" I'm not familiar what is posited is, or it is a typo? also the breakout info could be possible to relocate here.
• blandness and lack of uniqueness. I don't see neither game rant and Automaton source mention his personality?

@Greenish Pickle!(🔔) (talk · contribs) I've finished the run-through. A few notes

-The sources in the lead are already cited in the Reception.

-Thank you for the BTVA find, as when I nominated the article, that information was not currently known (Either that, or I hadn't noticed it yet)

-Added anime appearance.

-The blandness and lack of uniqueness definition is a generalization of what the paragraph's sources are primarily saying. If you feel this should be changed, let me know. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 23:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC)

All issues are resolved except the lead, maybe try to remove citations on lead and put it at reception for consistency on other pokemon articles. Only if you can, not really a big deal anyway. 🥒Greenish Pickle!🥒 (🔔) 23:49, 25 April 2024 (UTC)

I made the changes by myself. Passing it now. 🥒Greenish Pickle!🥒 (🔔) 00:41, 26 April 2024 (UTC)

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