Talk:Land mines in the Falkland Islands/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Eddie891 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 18:15, 27 December 2020 (UTC)
an review throughought the next week Eddie891 Talk Work 18:15, 27 December 2020 (UTC)C
- Comments
- All sources seem reliable
- the licensing of File:Sp-33 mine.jpg seems kinda suspect
- Yeah, I looked at it. The user only uploaded two photos, this and the FMK mine image also used in the article. I looked around and couldn't see them used anywhere else online though. They also edited the Halcón ML-63 Argentine SMG article. I figured they may have some experience with the Argentine military, during which they took the photos - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)
- I'm not convinced the bolding of the title really fits here == unbolding it would also let you get a link to the Islands in the first sentence, which I do think would fit here
- " In the intervening years" not clear what years it's 'intervening'-- suggest in the following years or something
- Can you specify when the first efforts ended?
- "The mine fields were signed and fenced to warn visitors; no civilians have " I don't think the tenses line up here
- "The deadline was subsequently amended by agreement to 1 March 2019 and then to 1 June 2021; this was at the request of the British government owing to the high cost and slow outputs of clearance work" I think this may flow more naturally along the lines of "was subsequently amended at the request of the British government to 1 March and then 1 June, due to the high..." but I'm not sure
- "used to verify that areas are clear " again, not sure the tenses line up how they should
- Agreed, changed are to were
- "in the first phase of operations" what is the 'first phase'?
- "around 5 linear metres of a " should be converted, somehow?
- "The Argentinian records are generally good " good being 'accurate' or something else?
- "Records for mine fields on West Falkland were patchier " than what?
- "Once a mine field was cleared and proven safe" how were they proven safe?
- was the O-Revealer actually used in the Falkland Islands?
- "mines and releasing of previously inaccessible" what does "releasing" mean here?
- "By this time 70% of all known land mines " by the end or beginning of that season?
- Why would Argentina criticize the british operation for not including them? I'd expect them to be happy as they didn't have to pay for it?
- my ce is here, do change anything you're not happy with. Eddie891 Talk Work 19:55, 30 December 2020 (UTC)
- Sourcing
- Anything to add from articles like [1], [2], [3], [4] (from the abstract:"he background relating to the 14th July 1999 Joint Statement is considered in some detail as it relates to [...] land mines [...] on the Falkland Islands"