Talk:LAX Consolidated Rent-A-Car Facility
Latest comment: 1 year ago by RickyCourtney in topic People Mover
 | A fact from LAX Consolidated Rent-A-Car Facility appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 8 September 2022 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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Did you know nomination edit
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 10:15, 3 September 2022 (UTC)
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- ... that the LAX Consolidated Rent-A-Car Facility will be the largest rental car facility when it opens next year? Source: https://www.aviationpros.com/airports/press-release/21270138/lax-consolidated-rentacar-facility-achieves-tenant-hand-over-milestone-moves-one-step-closer-to-completion
- ALT1: ... that the LAX Consolidated Rent-A-Car Facility is the second-largest concrete building in the U.S. behind only the Pentagon? Source: https://www.aviationpros.com/airports/press-release/21270138/lax-consolidated-rentacar-facility-achieves-tenant-hand-over-milestone-moves-one-step-closer-to-completion
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Created by RickyCourtney (talk). Self-nominated at 20:39, 10 August 2022 (UTC).
Hi RickyCourtney. Welcome to DYK! The page is long enough and new enough. You did not have to review another page. We generally require an inline citation to end every paragraph. Your short paragraphs do not favor that style; consider longer paragraphs and using citations more. I favor ALT1 over ALT0, strongly, but would want a source that is not a press release. If you have questions, ping me. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:21, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
- Hello Sammi Brie and thank you for the helpful critique of the page. I will work on bulking up the paragraphs with additional citations. In the meantime, I have found a more reliable source for both claims in the DYK: Source: https://labusinessjournal.com/infrastructure/work-begins-lax/ Hope that works! --RickyCourtney (talk) 15:11, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
- That helps, RickyCourtney... But three paragraphs in the article body still need citations. Lots of short, choppy paragraph-sentences, too. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:26, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
- Alrighty Sammi Brie, I was able to add more sourcing and to make the paragraphs a bit chunkier. Hope that works. --RickyCourtney (talk) 18:18, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
Things look and read way better now. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:37, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
- Alrighty Sammi Brie, I was able to add more sourcing and to make the paragraphs a bit chunkier. Hope that works. --RickyCourtney (talk) 18:18, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
- That helps, RickyCourtney... But three paragraphs in the article body still need citations. Lots of short, choppy paragraph-sentences, too. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:26, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
- Hello Sammi Brie and thank you for the helpful critique of the page. I will work on bulking up the paragraphs with additional citations. In the meantime, I have found a more reliable source for both claims in the DYK: Source: https://labusinessjournal.com/infrastructure/work-begins-lax/ Hope that works! --RickyCourtney (talk) 15:11, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
People Mover edit
The final sentence reads, "From here,....." Where is "here?" Are we talking about the terminal? A little more clarification would be helpful....thx..Makermark (talk) 15:17, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
- Done. RickyCourtney (talk) 19:22, 8 September 2022 (UTC)