Talk:Kit Mueller/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 17:09, 5 December 2011 (UTC)

I'll review this article upon completion of the peer review. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:09, 5 December 2011 (UTC)

Peer review is complete.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:53, 8 December 2011 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "Following the school year, he played in the suburban summer league" I presume basketball league? Clarify since tennis is noted in the previous sentence, so it could be confusing.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:58, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
• "the team was ranked 23 in the Chicago Sun-Times'" 23rd
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:00, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
• "he was not one of the 9 area" nine
  • That is not consistent with WP:MOSNUM as I recall.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:02, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
• "He was benched for one game in early March of his junior year for disciplinary reasons by coach Dick Flaiz." This should be with the other junior info; out of place in his senior year section.
  • Oops. I added it to the wrong para.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:06, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
• "all conference selection." wouldn't All-Conference be capped and hyphenated like All-Chicago and All-State?
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:08, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Mueller's final shot was deflected by Mourning. It is remembered by Princeton fans as an uncalled foul" sentences could be combined (by Mourning, which is remembered by)
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:09, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

I'll put the article on hold and pass when issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:18, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

Everything looks good now. I'm fairly sure single digit numbers are written out if they're the only one in a sentence, but no big deal; article passes. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:09, 11 December 2011 (UTC)