Talk:Kirby's Dream Course/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:28, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "control Kirby" any chance of telling us who/what Kirby is?
  • Tried saying "the character Kirby". Kinda hard to not go into too much detail about what he is in something that short.
• Link power-up.
  • Done.
• Which Engvar? We have "favorable" (USEng) and "cancelled" (UKEng)...
  • Settled with "canceled".
• Hirokazu Ando is mentioned in the infobox but not in the article or referenced?
  • The mindset that most have on WP:VG (at least, I'm quite sure of it) is that for the staff listings, the game itself is the source and doesn't require any additional citations.
• Directors and producers are similarly mentioned there but not referenced or mentioned in the prose.
  • Same reason as above
• Image captions which are complete sentences need a full stop.
  • Done
• "September 21, 1994 as" comma after 1994.
  • Done.
• Where is European release date ref'd?
  • Couldn't find a reliable source for its European release date, so I just listed 1995. Somebody can always add the date back if they've got a source to back it up.
• "one of 30" one of thirty.
  • Done
• 'demonstrated as a playable demo" demo/demo repeat.
  • Done.
• ""though its concepts " some of them?
  • Done.
• " time.[16][15] " order.
  • Done.
• "of Computer & Video Games believed i" and not &
  • They're also known as Computer & Video Games, though since the article uses "and" instead of the ampersand I just used "and".
• " novelty.[5][4] " order.
  • Done. I keep forgetting to do this.
• Spaced hyphens in ref titles should be en-dashes per MOS.
  • Done.

Tbat's about it for a first pass, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 18:46, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

User:Namcokid47 going to address this? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:21, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

The Rambling Man: Addressed. Thank you for your patience. Namcokid47 07:50, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

I'm not convinced that the production staff are verified by the game itself. Can you show me a discussion where consensus concluded to that effect? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:59, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

The Rambling Man: I'm certain there was some kind of discussion regarding this, but I'm unable to find it right now. For the time being, I've chosen to remove the staff credits. Namcokid47 22:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Okay, seems satisfactory so I'll promote. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:06, 17 March 2021 (UTC)