Talk:Khalid ibn al-Walid/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Pyrotec (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2010 (UTC)

I will review. Pyrotec (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2010 (UTC)

Initial comments

Sorry for the delay in getting to this stage. I've now read the article (quickly) a couple of times and I've formed the impression that its about GA-level, possibly on its way to being a WP:FAC; but this review will only be considering it as a WP:GAN. There is at least one phrase that I don't like; but it seems to be well referenced and well-illustrated so I don't expect there will be too many problems.

Tomorrow, I will start the detailed review, but leaving the WP:Lead until last. At this stage I will be mostly concentrating on "problems", so I might not have much to comment on - but we will see. Pyrotec (talk) 21:00, 9 July 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the comments..

الله أكبرMohammad Adil 18:32, 10 July 2010 (UTC)

• Early life -

• Just a statement of curiosity. The desert is described as: "clear, dry and unpolluted air": perhaps so but there could be dust and sand storms.

• Muhammad's era (610–632) -

• Looks OK.

• Abu Bakr's era (632–634) -
  • Conquest of Arabia -

• Y Pyrotec (talk) 21:20, 12 July 2010 (UTC) - In ".... Khalid defeated Tulaiha,[26] a main rebel leader who claimed prophethood as a means to draw support for himself. His power was crushed after his remaining followers were defeated at the Battle of Ghamra.[24] Kalid ....", I assume that "His" referes to Tulaiha. Perhaps "His" could be replaced by Tulaiha?

....to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 20:43, 10 July 2010 (UTC)

Well in early life section, "clear" not clear in the sense that you can see clear blue sky ... it has been used to describe the environmental conditions.

I have replaced "his" with "tulaiha", as it may creates confusions for new readers. الله أكبرMohammad Adil 21:13, 10 July 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. Pyrotec (talk) 21:12, 12 July 2010 (UTC)

• Sorry, my geography is not too good in this area, is "state of Madinah" a typo (Madina appears eslewhere)?

• • Invasion of Persian Empire & Invasion of Eastern Roman Empire -

• These two subsections look OK.

....to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 21:20, 12 July 2010 (UTC)

State of Madinah refers to the small state created during the time of Prophet Mohammad. Madinah is the alternative spelling of Madina, as the spelling format should be same, so i have corrected it now as "state of Madina"

الله أكبرMohammad Adil 17:05, 13 July 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. Pyrotec (talk) 19:46, 13 July 2010 (UTC)

• Caliph Umar's era (634–642) -
  • Conquest of Central Levant -

• I think a unit of measurement is missing after 50 in this sentence: "Soon after the appointment of Abu-Ubaidah as commander in chief, he sent a small detachment to the annual fair held at Abu-al-Quds, modern day Abla, near Zahle 50 east of Beirut."
• In the same paragraph, I suggest that "it" is clarified (its probably the force, not the garrison): "Before it would have been completely destroyed, Abu Ubaidah, having received new intelligence ...."

Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)

• Stopping at this point. It a GA. Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)

Overall summary

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

---

A Good Article; and in my oppinion a WP:FAC.

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   Well referenced.

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   Well referenced.

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   Well-illustrated with route maps that contribute to the overall understanding of the article.

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Well-illustrated with route maps that contribute to the overall understanding of the article.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

I'm awarding this article GA-status. I beleive that it could make WP:FAC, but submitting to WP:PR first would help in identifying any areas of grammar that might to be improved. Congratulations on producing an informative historical article. Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)