Talk:Kenny Easley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:22, 1 July 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• Where is his middle name and birthdate referenced?
  • Done Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Easley played college football "... don't repeat his surname so quickly, perhaps just "He played..."
  • Done Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Then make it "...1981 NFL Draft, Easley..."
  • Done Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "In 1984"... try to avoid easter egg links.
  • Done, I think. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "after the 1987 season after" repetitive.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "after the 1987 season after he was diagnosed to have severe kidney disease. After" really repetitive.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "1999-2003" year ranges and scores should use an en-dash to separate them (per WP:DASH).
  • I think I got them all. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Infobox, "Strong Safety" is overcapitalised.
  • Done Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Beard-DeLong-Easley" I imagine this should be en-dashes rather than hyphenated.
  • Yes, fixed. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "His jersey number was retired by the school, and in 1991, Easley was " -> "Easley's jersey number was retired ... and in 1991 he was...".
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "but didn't play" avoid contractions.
  • Fixed the few examples I saw. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Pro career" do you mean "Professional career" as "pro" is a little colloquial.
  • Done Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• You relink 1981 NFL Draft a couple of times, but not Seattle Seahawks (for instance). Be consistent with your linking strategy.
  • Removed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "led the National Football League " you've already referred to this entity as the NFL so why suddenly expand the acronym again?
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "a 45-0 win" en-dash.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "He hurt his knee ..." bit weak, maybe "He injured his knee"
  • Used your example like you said. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "In December, Easley was rumored to be in the trading block..." this is all a little odd for me, I'm not sure how accessible this sentence is to non-experts, and I'm not sure we should be writing about "rumours".
  • The rumors were a part why his career ended prematurely, if it wasn't because of the trade that happened, the kidney disease probably would have been diagnosed early. I was thinking of another way to reword it. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "a 23-20 loss" en-dash.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Buffalo Bills defensive end Bruce Smith " since all this is linked, it's confusing.
  • Removed the first two links, people can simply click on the Smith article. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "Bruce Smith was named " comma after Smith.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• "He was also selected for the NFL 1980s All-Decade Team." ref?
  • Fixed Secret ^account 01:49, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
• Ref 1 needs publisher/work/author information.
• As do Refs 4, 6.
  • I replaced one of the sources, the other source (which I think its the old source 1 you are talking about) is a broken link will fix now the other two, problem is my overheating computer. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
    • Removed problematic source. Secret ^account 01:49, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
• Ref 5 should lose the SHOUTING (similarly in 9, 11, 13, 14, 16, 18, 21, 22, 23 and 25)
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Ref 5, is that really the Boston Glove?
  • According to the linked source yes. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Retrieved date should be consistent in format.
  • Fixed, I think. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Highbeam in italics or not? Be consistent.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• Ref 17 should be The New York Times.
  • Fixed Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
• One template implies he's a member of the All-Century UCLA Bruin team, but this isn't covered.
  • I had issues verifying the information thus I nominated it for TFD, I expanded a bit on his college career however.
• Similarly the 35th anniversary team, and the "FWWA Quarter-century team", again not covered in the article.
  • Will add the information soon on all three above. Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)

GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Many prose-related comments above.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Some topics not covered (see comments).

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

I'll put this "on hold" pending resolution of the comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:22, 1 July 2013 (UTC)

Please let me know when my comments have been resolved. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:37, 25 July 2013 (UTC)

My apologizes, my computer has been overheating and turning off randomly the past month or so and because of a massive money drain my most recent illness a few months ago costs me, I am currently lacking the funds to replace it. That is why I am/was unable to focus on one particular thing on the present moment that takes me more than 30 minutes like content work or GA reviews (I had literally finished one GA review and about to click save when my computer turned off, losing the review). I should be able to finish your concerns by tomorrow, as I will be in the University the whole day (and not using my fried laptop). Secret ^account 00:32, 1 August 2013 (UTC)

No worries. Ping me when you're done. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:21, 2 August 2013 (UTC)