Talk:Kardinya, Western Australia

GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 13:13, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi! I saw this article on the GAN backlog. I will start the review asap. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 13:13, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments

General

• Although optional, I would prefer the addition of a {{short description}} on top of the article.
• Link the "European settlement" in the lede and "Before European colonisation" section with the History of Australia (1788–1850) article.
• Rest of the lede is alright and it is well-written. It satisfies the manual of style.
• Move the "History" section above the "Geography and natural history" section which can be renamed to "Geography and nature".
• Link dunes in the Geography section. The rest of the section is good.
• "They lived on the area south" → isn't this supposed to be "in the area"?
• Law and order can be linked in the "European colonisation" section.
• Would prefer "The suburb was home to 8,730 people at the Australian Bureau of Statistics's 2016 census" → The suburb was home to 8,730 people according to the Australian Bureau of Statistics's 2016 census.
• "It sold groceries and had a petrol pump. That was demolished in the 1970s." – these two sentences should be merged.
• "Kardinya in the City of Melville local government area." → Kardinya is located in the City of Melville local government area.
• Link "centre-left" with centre-left politics and "centre-right" with centre-right politics.
• Labor Party and Liberal Party should be capitalized.

Images

• Thanks for taking the pictures, they look great. Alt texts are also included, great!

Sources

• 2016 census source is used multiple times in the article, it can be removed from the infobox per MOS:INFOBOXREF.
• "However, especially for objects like boundaries (of neighborhoods, allotments, etc.), where other reliable sources are available they should be preferred over Google Maps and Google Street View." – if there is a different reliable source that is not Google Maps then you should replace the Google Maps source with the different one, otherwise it can stay if there aren't any.
• Rest of the sources are reliable and they can stay.

@Steelkamp: I will put the article on hold until these small things get fixed. Good job! --Vacant0 (talk) 14:52, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

@Vacant0: Thank you for doing this. I have made all the changes you asked. Steelkamp (talk) 16:06, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

No problem, thanks for fixing it. I'm promoting this to GA. --Vacant0 (talk) 16:33, 2 January 2022 (UTC)