Talk:Kalki Koechlin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: FrB.TG (talk · contribs) 12:09, 25 January 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Get rid of the references in the lede (ones that are repeated throughout the main body of the article) as they are supposed to be covered in the main body of the article. No need of repeating them, per WP:LEAD.

 The reference in the first sentence is required for her work, right?

• "who is pre-dominantly known for her work in Hindi films" – Bollywood is more preferable.

 Done

• Add the genre for My Friend Pinto in the sentence as you have the genres for the other films mentioned in the sentence where it is.

 Done

• Anurag Kashyap (2011–2015) → (2011–15)

 Done

Early life

• "kindergarten at Hebron School, Ooty, then did a short" – replace "then" with "and".

 Done

Career

• "Koechlin, after moving to Mumbai, gave the audition" –you an just say "auditioned" instead of "gave the audition".

 Done

• You say that Dev D. received positive reviews but right after the sentence, you have written a review with only two-and-a-half-star. Have one which reflects the fact.

 Added Review

• "While Shubhra Gupta of The Indian Express mentioned her as" – I don't understand the purpose of "While" in the beginning of the sentence.

 Removed

• "Next year, she acted" → "The following year, she acted"

 Done

• "crime-thriller Shaitan with a large cast" – I don't know about the film but if by "large cast", you mean "ensemble cast", I think the latter is better.

 Done

• There is no reference for her Stardust nomination for her role in Shaitaan.

 Added reference

• " Best Supporting actress for" – the "A" of "actress" needs to be in capital as it's a proper noun.

 Done

• "Premiered at the 2012 Toronto film festival," → 2012 Toronto Film Festival

 Done

• "Vassilis Vassilikos novel Z (1967)" → "Vassilis Vassilikos' novel Z (1967)"

 Done

• Could you merge the two-line paragraph about her film Happy Ending to the above or below paragraph?

 Done

• The same for the mini web-series Man's world.

 Done

• "opposite veteran actor Naseeruddin Shah" – "veteran" is so WP:NPOV.

 Removed

• "The film had it's world" → its

 Done

• "at the Dubai International Film Festival (DIFF) in December" –which year?

 Done

On stage

• "She took to Twitter to make the announcement and shared the official Facebook page" – it is pretty similar to the sentence mentioned in ref 66.

 Removed

Personal life

• Ooty is already linked in the Early life section.

 Done

• In Oct 2014 is not acceptable. Use the full form.

 Done

• "Kashyap and Koechlin have shared a healthy relationship" – what does "healthy relationship" mean here?

 Removed

In the media

• The first two paragraphs in the section do not belong there. Merge it to the Personal life section.

 Done

• Feminism is linked twice in the section.

 Removed link

Filmography

• Where is the source for A Death In The Gunj?

 Done

• Don't leave her unconfirmed roles empty. Write them as "TBA" or something.

 None remain

Awards and nominations

• The table does not meet MOS:DTT and MOS:DTAB.

 Fixed format

• There is no reference for her Stardust nomination for Shaitaan.

 Done

References

• Ref 1 – Mail Today needs to be in italics as it's a newspaper.

 Done

• Ref 3 – It's The Indian Express. Also, it needs to be wiki-linked. Also the date like "2 Sep 2011" is not acceptable. The same applies for other ones in the section.

 Done

• Ref 7 – It's The Times of India.

 Done

• Ref 10 – Tehelka is a magazine so italicize it.

 Done

• Wiki-link Hindustan Times and India Today in ref 12 and 13, respectively.

 Done

• Ref 19 - ditto

 Done

• Ref 20 - You missed an "a" in Bollywood Hungama

 Done

• Ref 21 - Rediff.com needs to be wiki-linked.

 Done

• Ref 32 - italicize THR.

 Done

• Ref 34 - Link the publisher.

 Done

• Ref 36 - italics please.

 Done

• Ref 37 - It's Box Office India

 Done

• Ref 42 - Link Filmfare.

 Done

• Ref 45 – ditto. Also, it needs to be in italics there and in ref 45.

 Done

• Ref 48 – wiki-link Firstpost

 Done

• Ref 49 - needs an access date. Also, how is it possible that it is September 2016?

 Done

• Ref 52 - no italics please.

 Done

• Ref 53 - The Times of India

 Done

• A lot of references are missing accessdates.

 Have added accessdate to references that I personally added, but, how do i go about the refrences I did not add? Add the present date? Numerounovedant Talk 9:41, 26 January 2016 (UTC)

Yeah, that's okay IMO.

 Done

• I see a few instances of WP:SHOUTING in the section.

 Done

@FrB.TG: Thank you for taking up the review! Have made most of the asked changes & amends, and working on the rest. Have added information in the Media image and Personal life sections (They were in my sandbox, just wanted them to be reviewed too.) Could you take a look through them too? Thank You! 9:55, 26 January 2016 {UTC)

• I have seen that in some places throughout the article, you have used her first name, which is quite informal. Please make sure that in the prose (except the quotes of course) you have used her last name.

 Changed to Koechlin or pronoun

• "it also earned her another Best Actor in a supporting role nomination at Filmfare" – can be rephrased with something like "for the film, she earned her third Filmfare Award for Best Supporting Actress nomination"

 Changed

• "The Video went viral with" – The video.

 Done

• "John Beifuss of the The Commercial Appeal called Koechlin's performance Oscar nomination" – I think you can remove the Oscars bit as it's already there in the quote that makes it repetitive.

 Removed

• "many stage plays in India, most recently" – see WP:CURRENTLY.

 Removed and Rephrased

• I don't think that using "the actress" is a pretty good choice as it's so magazine-y.

 Changed

• In Media image section: "Kalki's also associated with Fashion brands" → "Koechlin is also associated with fashion brands"

 Done

• It should be "Media image", not "Media Image".

 Done

@FrB.TG: Thank you for the help! Made all the mentioned amends. Numerounovedant Talk 16:57, 26 January 2016 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.

   Pass or Fail:

Good job! -- Frankie _talk 17:16, 26 January 2016 (UTC)

Thank you! Numerounovedant Talk 18:38, 26 January 2016 (UTC)