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TheProfessor (talk) 19:19, 18 April 2014 (UTC) Kalani Oceanside Retreat Article Outline – 15-May-2014
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Encyclopedic Tone, Sources
editA strong effort has been made to write this article with an encyclopedic tone: factual, organized, and based mostly on non-primary sources. Some of the sources contained hype that was stripped away. Please help improve the article with specific suggestions or edits. TheProfessor (talk) 17:25, 12 May 2014 (UTC)
- Removing everything sourced to kalani.com would be a good start. Alexbrn talk|contribs|COI 06:47, 13 May 2014 (UTC)
- OK, done. Thanks for your specific input to improve the article. Do you recommend anything else before removing the tags? TheProfessor (talk) 13:16, 14 May 2014 (UTC)
Are there more specific concerns before removing the tags? TheProfessor (talk) 18:15, 14 May 2014 (UTC)
- It's looking a lot healthier; I'd not object to the tags' removal ... Alexbrn talk|contribs|COI 05:33, 15 May 2014 (UTC)
Thanks. TheProfessor (talk) 05:35, 15 May 2014 (UTC)
I removed (commented out) a lot of stuff that was either inaccurate, outdated, or irrelevant
editI removed a lot of the formerly titled "Natural History" section as either irrelevant, inaccurate (about the subsurface of the then-undeveloped Kalani Kai property and not the surface of the Kalani Oceanside Retreat) or outdated (weather patterns and rainfall are completely and utterly different than they were in 1997). Softlavender (talk) 13:09, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for your interest in this article, Softlavender. I appreciate the effort to assure that information is relevant, accurate, and up to date. Some of the removed material should be reinstated and/or updated. TheProfessor (talk) 12:24, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
Citation problems
editTwo of the citations go to the wrong link: number 3 (labelled "Ke Ola magazine"), and 20 (labelled "State Senate"). The State Senate goof is particularly egregious. Please fix, thanks. Softlavender (talk) 13:24, 9 October 2015 (UTC)
- Link to citation 3 fixed; verified that link to citation 20 is correct (scroll down to see document at end of article). TheProfessor (talk) 12:11, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for explaining that, TheProfessor. I have edited the citation accordingly. Thanks again for creating these two articles. Happy editing! Softlavender (talk) 12:19, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
Introduction
editThe changed introduction contains the link to a subdomain of a deprecated website (see https://kalani.com/ with the message: This IP address is deprecated and is no longer able to serve the requested domain). Also the word ostensibly does not sound very neutral. Therefore I asked Softlavender for the reasons. --ThT (talk) 11:43, 28 December 2018 (UTC)
- Hi THT, I linked the actual live message rather than an archive of a dead link. It's not clear from the message that the closure is permanent, since the wording says "Temporary" and "currently". Softlavender (talk) 22:58, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Hi Softlavender, it's not about the words but the sequence of events and the corresponding announcements:
- In May Kalani closed its operations temporarily, stating "Recent earthquake activity on Kilauea’s south flank and lava eruptions in the Leilani Estates Subdivision are affecting air quality", cf. Temporary Campus Closure as of Monday, May 7, 2018 at the Wayback Machine (archived 20 August 2018)
- The following statement from June 2nd announced, that "all operations are indefinitely suspended", cf. Kalani Lava Update: June 2018 at the Wayback Machine (archived 20 August 2018)
- https://register.kalani.com/ links to a subdomain of a deprecated website (see https://kalani.com/ with the message: This IP address is deprecated and is no longer able to serve the requested domain.). Therefore this link could become unreachable anytime. Moreover, the announcement dated June 2nd contains additional information compared with the one dated May 7, 2018. According to Wikipedia:Link rot the use of archived information is an accepted procedure. @Peaceray also gave good reasons for including archived information (this may be referenced when the page changes). Therefore I suggest to find consensus for a good and accurate formulation and citation. Best, --ThT (talk) 17:52, 2 January 2019 (UTC)
- Ah, OK, I see your point. I think the best plan is to keep the live link (the original May announcement) and adding the follow-up indefinite-closure June announcements, one live on Facebook and one archived on the website. I've now done that. Softlavender (talk) 01:27, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks, that's fine with me. However, in the future, I'd prefer to find a consensus on the talk page before another edit. In my view, it's easier to discuss a suggested text (WP:TALK) than assuming the approval of other authors in advance. Best, --ThT (talk) 09:50, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- The approval of other editors is not needed. See WP:BOLD. -- Softlavender (talk) 10:44, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Well, in my experience it's just more efficient to cooperate with other authors. See Wikipedia:Consensus. Best, --ThT (talk) 13:33, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
- The approval of other editors is not needed. See WP:BOLD. -- Softlavender (talk) 10:44, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks, that's fine with me. However, in the future, I'd prefer to find a consensus on the talk page before another edit. In my view, it's easier to discuss a suggested text (WP:TALK) than assuming the approval of other authors in advance. Best, --ThT (talk) 09:50, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Ah, OK, I see your point. I think the best plan is to keep the live link (the original May announcement) and adding the follow-up indefinite-closure June announcements, one live on Facebook and one archived on the website. I've now done that. Softlavender (talk) 01:27, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Hi Softlavender, it's not about the words but the sequence of events and the corresponding announcements: