Talk:Kajaani/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Biblioworm (talk · contribs) 00:42, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

• Review  In progress. --Biblioworm 00:42, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

@AmaryllisGardener: Here is my review:

• Is the article well-written? - Here are the issues I've found:
  • There are 37,781 (30 September 2014)[5] inhabitants, and city surface area is 2,264.01 square kilometres (874.14 sq mi) of which 428.94 km2 (165.61 sq mi) is water.
    • Change to "As of 30 September 2014, there are 37,781[5] inhabitants, and city surface area is 2,264.01 square kilometres (874.14 sq mi), of which 428.94 km2 (165.61 sq mi) is water."
  • Folklorist Elias Lönnrot frequently went on leave of absence from his job as district doctor in Kajaani to collect folktales throughout Karelia.
    • Not sure if this sentence really needs to be in the lede.
  • The Russians blew the castle up in March 1716 and it has been in ruins ever since.
    • Add comma between "1716" and "and".
  • Vuolijoki was consolidated with Kajaani in the beginning of 2007.
    • Change "in" to "at".
  • The Kajaani River runs through Kajaani, thus the municipality is well known to fishermen because the river makes salmon fishing possible.
    • Change to "The Kajaani River runs through Kajaani; thus, the municipality is well known to fishermen because the river makes salmon fishing possible."
  • Summers are cool and in winter, temperature can drop below −30 °C (−22 °F).
    • Change to "Summers are cool, and in the winter, temperature can drop below −30 °C (−22 °F)."
  • The municipality has a population of 37,781 (30 September 2014)[5] (around 34,000 in the town itself) and covers an area of 2,264.01 square kilometres (874.14 sq mi) of which 428.94 km2 (165.61 sq mi) is water.
    • Change to "As of 30 September 2014, the municipality has a population of 37,781[5] (around 34,000 in the town itself) and covers an area of 2,264.01 square kilometres (874.14 sq mi), of which 428.94 km2 (165.61 sq mi) is water."
  • Since 1993 The Art Museum of Kajaani (Kajaanin taidemuseo) has operated in the city.
    • Add comma between "1993" and "The".
  • Paper industry was also very important employer.
    • Change to "The paper industry was also a very important employer."
  • UPM Kymmene's Kajaani paper mill was the biggest private employer in Kajaani and its history dated back to 1907.
    • Add comma between "Kajaani" and "and". For the sake of professionalism, it may also be a good idea to change "biggest" to "largest".
  • However UPM Kymmene decided to close the paper mill by the end of 2008 due to lack of profitability and high energy costs.
    • Change to "However, UPM Kymmene decided to close the paper mill at the end of 2008, due to lack of profitability and high energy costs."
  • Closure of a paper mill will be the end of one era in Kajaani's history.
    • I don't think this sentence is necessary.
  • UPM's Kajaani sawmill continued its operations as earlier.
    • Remove "as earlier".
• Is the article verifiable with no original research? - There's a couple of unsourced statements:
  • The barrels of tar were shipped to Oulujärvi and then along Oulujoki to Oulu on the Bothnian coast of the Baltic sea. From there, tar was shipped to continental Europe, where it was used as a sealant and an anti-rot agent for ship hulls.
  • ...originally known as Sana ja Sävel, and Kainuun JazzKevät (The Kainuu Jazz Spring).
• Is the article broad in its coverage? - Yes.
• Is the article neutral? - Yes.
• Is the article stable? - Yes.
• Is the article illustrated? - Yes.

• Result:  On hold until the issues are resolved. Thanks, --Biblioworm 02:29, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
• @Biblioworm: I have fixed all of the problems mentioned above. --AmaryllisGardener ^talk 03:30, 9 December 2014 (UTC)

@AmaryllisGardener: Thanks for your work. The article looks much better. I found a few minor things that I originally overlooked:

• • As of 30 September 2014, there are 37,781[5] inhabitants, and city surface area is 2,264.01 square kilometres (874.14 sq mi) of which 428.94 km2 (165.61 sq mi) is water.
    • Change "city surface area" to "the city's surface area".
  • Summers are cool, and in winter, temperature can drop below −30 °C (−22 °F).
    • Change "temperature" to "temperatures".
  • The population density is 20.59 inhabitants per square kilometre (53.3/sq mi) .
    • Fix stray space at the end of the sentence.

Other than that, however, the article looks good. Pass. Good work! :) --Biblioworm 04:14, 9 December 2014 (UTC)