Talk:Julio and Marisol

Latest comment: 2 years ago by RoySmith in topic GA Review


What needs improving? edit

@Awkwafaba: you rated this C class. I'd like to work on it more; can you give me some specific suggestions of things you found that needed improving? Thanks. -- RoySmith (talk) 15:11, 29 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

@RoySmith: sorry for the slow reply. I think other than adding an infobox, maybe put it up for a Good Article Review and you’ll get a lot of good advice. The work you’ve done so far is great. Thanks for your work! --awkwafaba (📥) 02:55, 5 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Julio and Marisol/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 14:32, 16 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:32, 16 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Basic stuff and comments edit

  • Non-free use rationale looks good.
  • "Story line" should be "Storyline"
  • "which ran" → "that ran"
  • Always [re]cite sources for quotes.
  • "she's" → "she is" (MOS:CONTRACTIONS)
  • Remove the comma after "told Julio".
  • Remove the comma after "another day".
  • "a HIV counselor" → "an HIV counselor"
  • "a HIV test" → "an HIV test"
  • "late 1980's" → "late 1980s"
  • "Use of condoms" → "The use of condoms"
  • a "HIV melodrama" → an "HIV melodrama"
  • Remove the comma after "returned in 1997".
Done with all that (except for making sure all the quotes are properly cited) got those now.
Sources
  • Avoid using quotation marks in citations (WP:QWQ).
I'm not seeing any places I did this incorrectly. Could you be more specific?
  Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 22:06, 17 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Add the "use mdy dates" template to fix citations (WP:BADDATE).
Done
  • Mark references from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from New York Magazine with "|url-access=subscription".
  • Mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from The Washington Post with "|url-access=limited".
Added all those
  • Newspaper.com sources should link to a clipping, not the newspaper title.
Hmmm, my newspapers.com subscription seems to have expired. I'll get back to you when I've got that sorted out.
Added a link. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 22:06, 17 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
Thanks!
  • Optional, but try archiving sources (you can use this tool).
Done. I hadn't known about that tool. Very nice!

Progress edit

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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