Talk:Jovian (emperor)/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Hog Farm in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:45, 19 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Criteria edit

1. Prose  Pass

2. Verifiability  Pass

3. Depth of Coverage  Pass

4. Neutral  Pass

5. Stable  Pass

6. Illustrations  Pass

7. Miscellaneous  Pass

Comments edit

1.

  • Wiklink Charito in the prose body. done
  • " He also joined the guards and by 363 had risen to the same command that his father had once held.[3] In this capacity in 361, he escorted Constantius' remains to the Church of the Holy Apostles." - The first sentence implies that he was appointed head of the guards in 363, but the second sentence suggests he was already appointed to that position by 361, two years earlier. This contradiction needs addressed, it may be a phrasing issue.done
  • "of the Orient had declined the purple" - I know enough about Roman history that this makes sense to me, but this won't make sense for all users and needs to be rephrased in a more clear manner.done
  • Link Scholaedone
  • You use Persians and Sasanids interchangeably, for consistency's sake, stick with one. (Probably Sasanids as more historically literal)done
  • Does Sasanids have one or two "s"'s? Both spellings are used, it should be consistent.done
  • "Sasanid Persia" is a duplink, as "Sassanid" links to the same article earlierdone
  • Link Antiochdone
  • "bills(famosi)" Space between the s and the (done
  • Wiklink his son in the text.done
  • Wiklink Constantinople done
  • Ancyra is a duplinkdone
  • Wikilink John Chrysostomdone
  • Wikilink Edessa at the first mention, not the seconddone
  • Add the month and year for the events in the Restoration of Christianity sectiondone
  • Wikilink Arianismdone
  • Wiklink bishopdone
  • "by the Apostate." - Probably better to put the name of the emperor's name in brackets [] after the Apostate instead of having a duplinkdone
  • Wikilink solidus in the infoboxdone
  • Church of the Holy Apostles should be linked at the first instance, instead of the second.done

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  • Endashes instead of short dashes in the page ranges in the refsdone

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  • The lead's a little bare, can this be expanded some? I expanded it a bit. What do you think?

Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 20:20, 19 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Done. Lead was expanded, see what you think. --Kansas Bear (talk) 21:45, 19 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Looks good, promoting. Hog Farm (talk) 21:53, 19 April 2020 (UTC)Reply