Talk:Joshua Ilustre/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:48, 27 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 14:48, 27 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Biography

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  • "Joshua Ilustre was born January 23, 1994 in Tamuning, Guam" - reword this piece of text so it reads as follows: Joshua Ilustre was born in Tamuning, Guam on January 23, 1994.
  • "Ilustre graduated from George Washington High School." - Wikilink George Washington High School to George Washington High School (Guam)
  • Do the same with walk-on which should be linked to Walk-on (sports)
  • "achieving summa cum laude." - Have no knowledge of what "summa cum laude" means but link it to Latin honors to aid those unfamiliar with the phrase

2016 Summer Olympics

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  • Wikilink Guam Track & Field Association and universality slots to Wild card (sports)
  • "Ilustre ran the 800 m in Rio." - Better: Ilustre ran the 800 metres in Rio de Janeiro. and add which heat he ran in
  • "Since he finished last in his heat, it would not have made a difference in the event if he was not disqualified," - try this: Since Ilustre finished last in his heat, there would have been no change in circumstances had he not been disqualified,

Post-Olympics

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  • "He returned to Portland to work as a medical transcriptionist," Ilustre returned to Portlant to work as a medical transcriptionist,

References

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  • Please remain consistent in how you present the work of your newspaper citations as Refs 3, 4, 7 should be ideally in the work field and not the publisher field
  • What is Run Guam?

That is all the quibbles I noticed during my read-through. None of these should be of too much difficulty to correct. MWright96 (talk) 15:17, 27 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: I only fixed one of them, someone else snagged the rest (thanks!), so I think it is all good now. Kees08 (Talk) 21:16, 27 February 2018 (UTC)Reply