Talk:Joseph Bosworth (Kentucky politician)/GA1

Latest comment: 12 days ago by LunaEatsTuna in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: Kentuckian (talk · contribs) 14:06, 14 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 04:35, 23 May 2024 (UTC)Reply


I will (hopefully) review this within the month. Template:LunaEatsTunaSig (talk), posted at 04:35, 23 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Okay, just so you know, I have since changed usernames.  Kentuckian |💬   16:10, 23 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
Lol, very fitting! @Kentuckian: sorry for the wait, I have now finished the review. Feel free to refute anything or ask me any questions and take as long as you need, ❧ LunaEatsTuna (talk), changing "is" to "was" since 2017 – posted at 22:26, 1 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
@LunaEatsTuna: I believe your concerns have been addressed. Unfortunately, I was unable to find any dates for when he was a coal operator, and I was unable to figure out what the F in his name stands for. Thank you for taking the time to review my article!  Kentuckian |💬   01:00, 4 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
That is fine! The article looks amazing; nice work! I am now happy to pass it for GA status. Congrats!! ❧ LunaEatsTuna (talk), making typos since 2017 – posted at 05:33, 4 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
Da review
  • Is it possible to add page numbers to the History of Kentucky book so that I know which specific pages are being cited?
Early life and education
  • Do we know what the F in his name stands for or nah?
  • Parents' names usually go last (because the birthdate/birthplace is more relevant).
  • "Veal in 1890, in Tazewell, Tennessee, they had" – should be "Veal in 1890, in Tazewell, Tennessee, and they had".
Career
  • I think it should be "where, for about ten years, he".
  • Regarding the coal companies, are there perhaps any dates available somewhere in any RS sources that say when he served those positions?
  • "elected judge of Middlesboro, Kentucky" – just "Middlesboro" is fine here since the location is already mentioned earlier.
  • Should it not be "for the 94th district" (and 17th district) since he was elected to represent those?
  • You should wikilink Kentucky House of Representatives and Republican Party (United States) (in Republicans).
  • "He served as speaker for two years from 1920 to 1922 until Republicans lost their majority" > "He served as speaker between 1920 and 1922 when the Republicans lost their majority" (saying "two years" is redundant here).
  • "He served as a representative until 1940" > "Bosworth served as a representative until 1940" since someone else was just mentioned.
  • The last paragraph needs a lot of tweaking:
    • The first two sentences both use Kentucky and amendments which make them sound a bit repetitive, so rephrase it if you can.
    • "Over eight years" – state which years here if possible so that it is more informative for readers.
    • "helped Middlesboro become a third-class city instead of a fourth-class city" – explain what these terms mean.
    • Explain what the Kentucky Pure Food and Drug Law did, as you do so for the appropriation law.
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