Talk:Jonathan Elliot (publisher)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 22:10, 1 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Elli (talk · contribs) 00:32, 4 April 2024 (UTC)

Initial comments

I'll review this soon. Nothing immediate I can see that would justify a quickfail. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:32, 4 April 2024 (UTC)

Oh, also, you should probably histmerge this with Jonathan Elliot (historian) (you'll need to get an admin for that). Elli (talk | contribs) 00:35, 4 April 2024 (UTC)

Early life

• He enlisted within the United States Army upon his return, although likely did not see combat due to a lack of major campaigns during his period of service. I don't think the sources state this strongly enough? Would prefer something like upon his return, with the intent of serving in the War of 1812, though it is unclear whether he saw combat.
  • That's a better phrasing, added. Ty! - G

News publications

• First sentence is a comma splice (or I guess could be read as otherwise? but in any case is awkward).
  • Fixed. - G
• I'd go with phrasing like heavily championed Georgia senator William H. Crawford's campaign for the Democratic-Republican nomination in the 1816 United States presidential election (also link the Democratic-Republican party)
  • Good idea, fixed. - G

History publications

• Is Debates notable? In any case, I'd flesh out your description a bit more here -- also, the relevant part of Powell is more than just p689 so you should check the page range on that.
• In general I think this section could probably be expanded to a few paragraphs.

Personal life and death

• Not sure if the names of some of his kids are noteworthy, assuming they aren't notable in any way?
  • Fair point. -G
• Maybe try to dig up the obituaries cited here, or other newspapers from the time, to see if there's any more details on him? Though yeah I'd imagine they'd be pretty sparse.
  • Added a little bit of info from his only obituary. - G

Images

• File:Report of 1800 cover.JPG is certainly PD (maybe should be moved to Commons but that's not in the scope of GA)

Lead

• Lead should probably be split into two paragraphs. I'd mention a bit more about the impact of his publications here.
  • Done. -G
• Infobox should estimate his age at death (using {{Death date and age}}).
  • Fixed! - G

Overall

• Article looks quite good; just a few things that need to be addressed. Elli (talk | contribs) 04:28, 4 April 2024 (UTC)
  • @Elli: Okay, I think I fixed it all up! - G
  • @Elli: driveby failed ping (didn't use a full sig) ^Queenof_Hearts 05:09, 4 April 2024 (UTC)

    ope, right. forgot that was needed Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 05:10, 4 April 2024 (UTC)

    Your changes here look good and have addressed all of my concerns. Passing. Elli (talk | contribs) 17:07, 4 April 2024 (UTC)

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