Talk:Johnson Controls/Archives/2013

Requested update to 'Business Units' section

Hello. This is Anna Timms, Senior Manager of Social Media, Johnson Controls. I am aware that I have a conflict of interest so I will not make any changes directly to the Johnson Controls article. Instead, please can someone else review my proposed changes to the article which I have detailed below?

The current section of the article titled 'Business Units' does not describe the operations of the business units. To solve that problem and describe the operations of the business units I have written the following draft: User:Anna_C_Timms/sandbox1.

Please could an editor review the draft linked to above. If you agree with the draft, please can you incorporate it in to the 'Business Units' section?

Thank you. --Anna C Timms (talk) 21:06, 26 August 2013 (UTC)

Very nicely cited additional content. Added. -- John Broughton (♫♫) 18:53, 14 September 2013 (UTC)