Talk:John Wayne (song)/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

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GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 18:07, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 18:07, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Lead and infobox
  • Do you think that Malibu and New York City in the Studio parameter should be linked?
    • I also added the missing studios here. Thanks for catching this. —IB [ Poke ] 14:09, 9 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • For that part, I would also use New York City rather than New York as the city and the state are different.
  • In the infobox, you write Lady Gaga by her real name in the Songwriter(s) parameter and then by Gaga in the Producer(s). This is more of a clarification question, but is she cited under two different names in the album credits?
    • Usually, singers are allotted their songwriting royalties under their real name, and thats the name given in liner notes. So we use the real name in the infobox, for the songwriter parameter, to tally with ASCAP/BMI etc as well as the liner notes. —IB [ Poke ] 14:09, 9 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • For this part (the videos of singles), I would revise it to (the videos for singles).
  • I am a little confused by this sentence (It completes a storyline that started with the videos of singles "Perfect Illusion" and "Million Reasons", showing Gaga in different action-packed sequences.). I would not described the “Million Reasons” as necessarily “action-packed”.
  • For this part (and taking inspiration from action films), do you think that you should add a link for action films?
Recording and composition
  • Please move the image to the right to avoid having John Wayne looking away from the page.
  • I would use “Lady Gaga” in the first sentence as this is the first time you mentioned her in the body of the article.
  • You mention here that she recorded the song at four locations, but the infobox only has two locations.
  • In this part (as it combines "tinny Euro-house synths, slowed-down funk drums and a boot-scooting bass line straight out of Nashville”), do you think that you should link Eurohouse (which redirects to Eurodance)?
Critical reception
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  • I am a little confused by the structure of this section. What are the main ideas/topics of the first two paragraph? I understand that the third paragraph is about the mixed/negative reception, but the first two paragraphs seems a little unorganized to me. Maybe some topic sentences would be helpful here to make things clearer? I always find this resource to be helpful when organizing reception sections.
    • Yes I rearranged it based on the musical direction and content (positive), then the negative in another para. —IB [ Poke ] 14:09, 9 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Music video
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  • Great work with this section. I cannot find anything that requires further improvement/revision.
Live performances
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  • Great work with this section. I cannot find anything that requires further improvement/revision.
Final comment
  • Great work with this article. once my comments are addressed. I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 18:23, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
    • Thank you @Aoba47: for taking this up and I have addressed your concerns. —IB [ Poke ] 14:09, 9 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Verdict
  • Thank you for addressing your comments. I will  Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 16:59, 9 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
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