Talk:John Galsworthy/GA1
Latest comment: 22 days ago by 750h+ in topic GA Review
GA Review edit
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Nominator: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 09:54, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 09:41, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
@Tim riley: i'll be taking this one. 750h+ 09:41, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
prose edit
- lede
- "Born to a prosperous upper-middle-class family, Galsworthy was destined for a career as a lawyer, but found it uncongenial and turned instead to writing." comma unneeded in british english
- See p. 249 of the current edition of Modern English Usage: I agree that "that stops should not be used unless they are needed" but can be used to help the reader's eye along the desired path. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
- life and career
- "His biographer David Holloway comments that in describing a character in a 1930 short story, Galsworthy was in fact describing his schoolboy self" remove "in fact".
- "legal education by studying aspects of maritime law at close quarters with a view to specialising in it once back at home." ==> "legal education by studying aspects of maritime law at close quarters to specialise in it once back at home."
- "Until the death of John Galsworthy senior in 1904, Ada and Galsworthy kept their relationship secret, because a scandal would have distressed the old man greatly." remove the comma.
- As above. I concur with Sir Bruce Fraser's advice in the second edition of Plain Words, here. Tim riley talk 11:56, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
- "Galsworthy published his first work of fiction in 1897, when he was aged 30." remove the comma
- "The marriage, which was childless, lasted until his death." ==> "The childless marriage lasted until his death."
- "In 1912 and 1913 he carried on an effective campaign in the cause of humane slaughtering of animals killed for food." ==> "In 1912 and 1913 he carried on an effective campaign for the cause of the humane slaughtering of animals killed for food."
- "It was well and widely reviewed, although it did only modestly at the box-office." should there be a hyphen between "box" and "office"?
- "...which he declined, on the grounds that "no artist of Letters ought..." ==> ""which he declined, because "no artist of Letters ought..."
- "In accordance with his will, his ashes were scattered from an aeroplane over the South Downs." ==> "Per/Under his will, his ashes were scattered from an aeroplane over the South Downs."
- works
- "hypocrisy, selfishness and exploitation of the poor and of women
ofall classes" - "Not all Galsworthy's plays are of this kind." ==> "Not all of Galsworthy's plays are of this kind."
image review edit
- Images are fine and are appropriately licensed. some have WP:ALT text. If you could ensure that all of the images have alt text that'd be great. 750h+ 10:07, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
source review edit
i'll be spot checking this version if that's all right.
- 2 OK
- Holloway source of 7 OK
- 8 OK
- 9 OK
- 12 OK
- 16 OK
- 25 OK
- 38 OK. I've verified that via Newspapers.com.
- 41 OK
- 63 OK
- 68 OK
- 69 OK
- 98 OK
- 105 OK
Ok i'm happy with the sourcing :). 750h+ 10:27, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
verdict edit
- Okay so a lot of these suggestions were just my stupidity. unless you have any other comments Tim riley, i'd be happy to pass this article for GA. 750h+ 12:24, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
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