Talk:John Balmer/GA1
Latest comment: 13 years ago by Ian Rose in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk) 07:26, 20 March 2011 (UTC)
I'll review this article either tonight or over the next few days.
- Interesting, I'm sure I checked this a few times after you opened the page but only just seen the comments now even though the history says you posted them on the 20th...! Anyway, better late than never (on my part) -- and many thanks for reviewing. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
Comments edit
This is a very high quality article. I've got a few comments, of which only the third, fourth and sixth are really relevant to passing the GA criteria:
- Should "on the 1933 'B' course" be "in the 1933 'B' course"?
- What's meant by "commissioned as a pilot"? ("commissioned" is usually used to refer to earning a rank rather than qualifying as something)
- The ADB entry doesn't say that he gained "national attention as a long-distance motorist", though this does seem likely.
- "Parallel to his Air Force career" sounds a bit odd as he obviously wasn't flying aircraft and driving cars simultaneously.
- I didn't think it really came across like that the way it's worded. I thought about this at the time and decided it was better to put it this way so it wasn't implied that he left the Air Force for a time (as some did before the war, and then rejoined) when he took up motoring. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- Fair enough - I was probably being rather pedantic here
- I didn't think it really came across like that the way it's worded. I thought about this at the time and decided it was better to put it this way so it wasn't implied that he left the Air Force for a time (as some did before the war, and then rejoined) when he took up motoring. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- "cannibalised" might be a bit unclear to readers who aren't familiar with the ways in which military units are formed - you could say that 13 Sqn was formed by "splitting" 12 Sqn or similar.
- "before returning to the New Guinea Campaign at its new base in Milne Bay" - this reads as if Milne Bay was the new base for the campaign, not the squadron
Assessment against GA criteria edit
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
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