Talk:Joey Hamilton/GA2
Latest comment: 15 years ago by Giants27 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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I'll be reading through this article, and within the next day or two, will post the review here. Jamie☆S93 13:04, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- I did some copyediting and minor cleanup.
- He was then called up for the second straight season to the Wichita Wranglers - I've seen similar terminology in sports-related articles (being "called up to the roster"), but "second straight season with the Wichita Wranglers", or something similar, might flow better.
- With the Padres in 1998, which turned out to be Hamilton's last in San Diego, he had a 13-13 record, 4.27 ERA in 34 starts and 217.1 innings pitched - Hamilton's last what?
- Added the word season.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Around the 1998 trade deadline there was a rumored trade that would send Pete Harnisch to San Diego and Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized. - I'm confused in the beginning of the sentence, with the trade's deadline being introduced first.
- Reworded to There was a rumored trade around the 1998 MLB trade deadline that would send Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- a started 20 games and came in relief in 22 games - is "relief" a baseball term? Otherwise, it doesn't seem to fit there.
- Yes it is would you like me to link to something related to it?--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Yes, linking the term would be nice. Otherwise, not sure I would have known. Jamie☆S93 21:57, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Linked to Relief pitcher.--Giants27 (c|s) 22:00, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Yes, linking the term would be nice. Otherwise, not sure I would have known. Jamie☆S93 21:57, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Yes it is would you like me to link to something related to it?--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- with Cincinnati before bouncing around training camps and the minor leagues (from the lead) - something like "transferring" would be better than the colloquial "bouncing".
- Changed.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:55, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Footnotes 4, 9, 10, 11, and 16 have no publisher info.
- Fixed.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- All sources that are part of a larger publication should be italicized in the refs, or switched from "publisher=" to the "work=" parameter (i.e., newspapers like Los Angeles Times, Houston Chronicle, etc.) Also, Baseball-Reference.com seems to be web-only, so I don't think it should be in italics.
- Linked all large publications on first occurance.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- If possible, could you link all of the publishers that have articles? Either that, or delink BR.com. If you do link all the publishers, link the first instance only.
- I delinked baseball reference, most of the publishers were archives.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- He was granted free agency on October 30, 2002. Is that sourced?
- Sourced it.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- He was granted free agency on October 30, 2002. Is that sourced?
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Looks good enough to me, it seems to follow most/all of his career.
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- No image, but that's fine.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- This is a nice article and a near-complete work. I have placed it on hold and look forward to passing it once the above issues are addressed. Good luck. :-) Jamie☆S93 21:03, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
I took another glance through (the first point is not a big deal), and am passing the article as a GA now. Congratulations! A nice independence day Good Article for ya, enjoy. :-) Best, Jamie☆S93 23:09, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, you have a great July 4th, too.--Giants27 (c|s) 23:14, 4 July 2009 (UTC)