Talk:Joey Hamilton/GA2

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Giants27 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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I'll be reading through this article, and within the next day or two, will post the review here. JamieS93 13:04, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    I did some copyediting and minor cleanup.
    • He was then called up for the second straight season to the Wichita Wranglers - I've seen similar terminology in sports-related articles (being "called up to the roster"), but "second straight season with the Wichita Wranglers", or something similar, might flow better.
    • With the Padres in 1998, which turned out to be Hamilton's last in San Diego, he had a 13-13 record, 4.27 ERA in 34 starts and 217.1 innings pitched - Hamilton's last what?
    • Around the 1998 trade deadline there was a rumored trade that would send Pete Harnisch to San Diego and Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized. - I'm confused in the beginning of the sentence, with the trade's deadline being introduced first.
      • Reworded to There was a rumored trade around the 1998 MLB trade deadline that would send Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • a started 20 games and came in relief in 22 games - is "relief" a baseball term? Otherwise, it doesn't seem to fit there.
      • Yes it is would you like me to link to something related to it?--Giants27 (c|s) 21:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • with Cincinnati before bouncing around training camps and the minor leagues (from the lead) - something like "transferring" would be better than the colloquial "bouncing".
    • Footnotes 4, 9, 10, 11, and 16 have no publisher info.
    • All sources that are part of a larger publication should be italicized in the refs, or switched from "publisher=" to the "work=" parameter (i.e., newspapers like Los Angeles Times, Houston Chronicle, etc.) Also, Baseball-Reference.com seems to be web-only, so I don't think it should be in italics.
      • Linked all large publications on first occurance.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • If possible, could you link all of the publishers that have articles? Either that, or delink BR.com. If you do link all the publishers, link the first instance only.
      • I delinked baseball reference, most of the publishers were archives.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    He was granted free agency on October 30, 2002. Is that sourced?
    Sourced it.--Giants27 (c|s) 21:53, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    Looks good enough to me, it seems to follow most/all of his career.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    No image, but that's fine.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    This is a nice article and a near-complete work. I have placed it on hold and look forward to passing it once the above issues are addressed. Good luck. :-) JamieS93 21:03, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

I took another glance through (the first point is not a big deal), and am passing the article as a GA now. Congratulations! A nice independence day Good Article for ya, enjoy. :-) Best, JamieS93 23:09, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

Thanks, you have a great July 4th, too.--Giants27 (c|s) 23:14, 4 July 2009 (UTC)Reply