Talk:Joey Hamilton/GA2
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Giants27 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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I'll be reading through this article, and within the next day or two, will post the review here. Jamie☆S93 13:04, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- I did some copyediting and minor cleanup.
- He was then called up for the second straight season to the Wichita Wranglers - I've seen similar terminology in sports-related articles (being "called up to the roster"), but "second straight season with the Wichita Wranglers", or something similar, might flow better.
- With the Padres in 1998, which turned out to be Hamilton's last in San Diego, he had a 13-13 record, 4.27 ERA in 34 starts and 217.1 innings pitched - Hamilton's last what?
- Around the 1998 trade deadline there was a rumored trade that would send Pete Harnisch to San Diego and Hamilton to the Detroit Tigers but the trade never materialized. - I'm confused in the beginning of the sentence, with the trade's deadline being introduced first.
- a started 20 games and came in relief in 22 games - is "relief" a baseball term? Otherwise, it doesn't seem to fit there.
- with Cincinnati before bouncing around training camps and the minor leagues (from the lead) - something like "transferring" would be better than the colloquial "bouncing".
- Footnotes 4, 9, 10, 11, and 16 have no publisher info.
- All sources that are part of a larger publication should be italicized in the refs, or switched from "publisher=" to the "work=" parameter (i.e., newspapers like Los Angeles Times, Houston Chronicle, etc.) Also, Baseball-Reference.com seems to be web-only, so I don't think it should be in italics.
- If possible, could you link all of the publishers that have articles? Either that, or delink BR.com. If you do link all the publishers, link the first instance only.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Looks good enough to me, it seems to follow most/all of his career.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- No image, but that's fine.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
I took another glance through (the first point is not a big deal), and am passing the article as a GA now. Congratulations! A nice independence day Good Article for ya, enjoy. :-) Best, Jamie☆S93 23:09, 4 July 2009 (UTC)