Talk:Joe El

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Kambai Akau in topic Article

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Trying to help, I raise points as I observe, and you can reply just below each bullet:

  • Something needs to be done about the paragraph about his father's alleged murder. It needs to be factual, and twitter and others can just be dropped, better two good sources.
  • In the Musical sction, please - for the moment - drop everything that has no source, - you can comment out until you find one by <!-- at the beginning and --> at the end.
  • Avoid terms of personal narration such as "revealed". This "where he hoped to achieve his dream of being among the world's greatest musicians. It took a struggle before he finally met" is just not encyclopedic, could be dropped.
  • Avoid too much detail even if you have a source.
  • The recordings and nominations need a ref.
  • For any ref, provide minimum title and publisher (or website), if available also author, url, date, language if not English, accessdate (if not book). --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:00, 17 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

19 August

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I gave it a round of copyediting, with detailed edit summaries. Please add references for the open lines, the first and the last. Do you have a review, or a source describing his music and/or style? The hidden link to the other name of 2Baba is too much of a mystery, also we don't link the same thing twice. If the other name needs to be mentioned, try a different way. Quite generally: no need to describe linked organizations. If they have an article they are notable. - Good luck! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:35, 19 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Gerda Arendt: - Okay. Thanks for these pieces of advice. I have improved thus far! Kambai Akau (talk) 21:35, 14 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

20 August

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I looked at the sources, dropped a blog supporting something we have 3 good sources for, dropped another which doesn't support a vague promotional sentence, formatted a bit. Please have some of the later ones sooner. Do we have any complete list of his recordings? Yesterday's question still open: how can we - sourced! describe his music? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:24, 20 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Gerda Arendt: - Thank you so greatly for helping out in making this page stand. Much thanks! Kambai Akau (talk) 21:32, 14 September 2020 (UTC)Reply