Talk:Joe Colbeck/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk) 21:28, 8 November 2010 (UTC) Nice work on this one, no real problems.

• "...Colbeck soon also left and joined Hereford United." Maybe "COlbeck also left soon after and joined Hereford United."
• Maybe say who the Bantams are?
• Is it worth saying which division the clubs were in? Most people won't know unless they are fans.
• "...disappointed to see Colbeck leave saying, "Joe was fantastic for us. He scored a couple of goals and had a real effect on us so we're sorry to see him go."": Does it need to say "disappointed to see Colbeck leaving" as the quote covers this?
• I wouldn't start the Oldham section with "however".
• "give his team some width": Ok for GA, but if you were taking it further, maybe explain what this is for the casual reader.
• "Ahead of the 2007–08 season, Colbeck, who had yet to score before then, admitted he needed to score more goals." Is this necessary? It's a little clunky and would probably be better to say he did not score much?
• It says he was a right winger in the lead and playing style section; is it worth putting it in to his career section? Not sure, just wondering.

• I'm sure it would be there if you had it, but... Any more on his personal life, family, etc. If not, I'd still pass, but I know some people get very uptight if there is no personal info...
• Any images? I hate GAs with no images... :)
• Ref 2 and 6 are deadlinks. There look to be a few weird redirects but these aren't a problem.
• Refs seem fine and article is well sourced: looked at a selection and they are fine.

Just minor points. A really good piece of work, covers his career nicely without going into too much dull stats. Style section is really thorough too. --Sarastro1 (talk) 21:28, 8 November 2010 (UTC)

I've addressed most of the points above or changed the wording. The only one I haven't done is the "disappointed" bit. At the moment, I like the way it flows - I'll have another look, but can you suggest any way to reword it.

Apart from his school, there's not much I can find out about his personal life. I know his dad died two years ago, but other than non-reliable sources and/or Facebook, there's no sources available to add any further text at this moment in time.

I can't find any free images of Colbeck and the only images I'd be able to add would be non-specific ones for the sake of adding images. I agree on your point though ;-).

Got the two deadlinks - the T&A keeps changing the web addresses for loads of old stories; very infuriating. I suspect the weird redirects are for similar reasons.

Thanks very much for another review. Brad78 (talk) 23:26, 8 November 2010 (UTC)

All fine now and the "disappointed" part isn't a big deal, so I'll pass it. --Sarastro1 (talk) 21:42, 9 November 2010 (UTC)