Talk:Jill Valentine/GA3
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:02, 18 January 2015 (UTC)
I will have this completed by tomorrow at the latest ☯ Jaguar ☯ 17:02, 18 January 2015 (UTC)
- I am sorry for the delay; real life stuff has got in the way lately. I promise to finish this tomorrow morning ☯ Jaguar ☯ 23:47, 19 January 2015 (UTC)
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Initial comments edit
- "During the events of Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, Resident Evil: The Umbrella Chronicles, Resident Evil 5 and Resident Evil: Revelations, she escapes from a city overrun by zombies" - this makes it sound like all of those games have the same plot - that she escapes from a city overrun by zombies? Is this true?
- The lead could summarise the article a little better. For example the opening of the second paragraph could be expanded a little on what the critics thought of her character?
- "are deployed to investigate a series of bizarre murders in the Arklay Mountains" - is this a fictionalised location?
- "She is also the sole protagonist in Resident Evil: Genesis (2008), an alternative-story version of this game" - shouldn't this be in chronological order? A jump from 1996 to 2008 seems confusing as the next paragraph opens with Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, a 1999 game
- "a member of the Umbrella Corporation's paramilitary force double-crossed by their employer" - how about betrayed?
- "Jill Valentine has been received favorably as the Resident Evil series' main female protagonist and remains one of its most recognisable characters" - by who? Critics?
- "A cheesy "You were almost a Jill sandwich" line" - not very encyclopaedic!
References edit
Seeing as the two previous GANs were failed on the basis on unreliable sources, this time the references have seriously improved.
- The toolserver picks up no actual dead links
- Ref 8, this is slightly risky as YouTube sources are generally not allowed, especially on VG articles. However per WP:VG/RS it states "videos will fail WP:USERG or WP:COPYVIO. However, official accounts secured by reliable source websites (IGN) or specific developers/publishers are still usable". The source gives it as "Official Capcom channel on YouTube", so I think this is acceptable. I have to be on the safe side and state this just in case anybody initially disagrees
- Ref 24 is missing a publisher
- Ref 27 is an unreliable YouTube source and is not official
- Ref 47 is missing an issue number, if possible
- The Issue number is the "1" that appears after "Resident Evil". I actually remember thinking it wasn't obvious what the number referred to when I formatted the reference, but it is filled out as per Template:Cite comic. Freikorp (talk) 23:12, 20 January 2015 (UTC)
On hold edit
Just a few prose issues and some more issues with the references that will need sorting out before this could meet the GA criteria. There is a invalid YouTube source left in and a couple that are missing a few details, but other than that the references have improved by leaps and bound since the previous GAN. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days until they can be addressed. Thanks! ☯ Jaguar ☯ 15:16, 20 January 2015 (UTC)