Talk:Jews in baseball/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Omnis Scientia (talk · contribs) 17:07, 21 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Shushugah (talk · contribs) 21:29, 8 September 2024 (UTC)

Initial

I am looking forward to reviewing your article. My knowledge of baseball is limited compared to my interest in WP:WikiProject Jewish history and WP:WikiProject Organized Labour so I immensely enjoyed reading this article. I will leave this review open for 2 weeks and request your confirmation that you're available to work on it. In certain cases I am willing to extend the review period as long as communication is flowing. Please ping me {{u|Shushugah}} when you've made progress. The article is incredibly comprehensive, neutrally written and very interesting! My nitpicks below are easily fixed. I specify where it's merely a friendly suggestion and where it's mandatory per the WP:GAN criteria. ~ 🦝 Shushugah (he/him • talk) 21:29, 8 September 2024 (UTC)

@Shushugah, hey there! Thanks for taking this up and I'm glad you enjoyed the article :) ! So I've added ticks where I've done what you've asked and added notes if needed. Looking forward to hearing back from you! Omnis Scientia (talk) 22:12, 8 September 2024 (UTC)

@Shushugah, just a reminder ping. Omnis Scientia (talk) 13:58, 10 September 2024 (UTC)

Shushugah, I hope all is well. Its been a couple of days. Would like a further review. Thanks (and sorry if I sound pushy! ). Omnis Scientia (talk) 20:44, 11 September 2024 (UTC)

@Shushugah, okay, I've done the references as you've asked and also double-checked them. Omnis Scientia (talk) 14:12, 12 September 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing review

Hey Omnis Scientia I hope you're doing well! I try read carefully through the sourcing, which takes time. Several claims are not substantiated by the sources they're linked to or missing important context. See some of the examples below. Could you also do a more thorough source verification, and see if there are any other issues?

•  Half done The 4 claims attributed to Vox are accurate....however neglecting to mention that Hank Green DID play on Rosh Hashanah and more critically, that it wasn't a tight game according to article. Verifying further at 1935 World Series Tigers won 3 games / lost 1 game just before Yom Kippur started with 2 more games left. Y
  • N NYTimes Source but doesn't say anything about Hank's game in detroit, besides a small line that like Koufax he didn't play on Yom Kippur. Would look for other facts here, but otherwise use above reference. It does include interesting tidbits about kind of antisemitism he experienced and also differences between 1930s and 1960s with regards to Jewish assimilation/stakes. Y -- Comment: I've added more context and detail to both.
•  Done both sources here about reserve clause case and origins of Major League Baseball Players Association are verified
• N I was checking how weighted/notable some of the names were. I found Al Rosen and Moe Berg but could not find any mention of Kevin Youkilis or Ryan Braun in this reference. Y

Image review

•  Done All 5 images used are permissibly licensed (Public Domain) and captioned appropriately. Not required for GA criteria (it should be imo) none of the images have alternative text for images which means visually impaired readers would miss out. Y

• File:Young Judean Baseball Team (26445507635).jpg might be an interesting photo with the Star of David on the baseball uniforms, however it's clearly a smaller team. Y Comment: Great picture! Works in "Outside the United States" section.

Layout/outline

•  Not done Wikipedia:Further reading section should be above WP:REFERENCES section Comment: Will do so but I've always seen it below references. Y
• I personally would remove Contributions 2nd level section its subsections to be their own sections. Y
• Rename Owners and executives to Management Y
• Rename Players' Union to Labor union or Baseball union(the current name sounds like a proper noun which it isn't) Y Comment: Changed to "Labor movement". Thought it sounded better.

Nitpicks

• before the two leagues combined -> before the two leagues merged into Major League Baseball Y
• Wiki link Stereotypes of Jews at Jews as non-athletic and bookish Y
• professional baseball since the beginning -> (when?) it is hinted later down with Lipman Pike who played in the 19th century Y
• labour -> labor (use American english spelling) Y
• home runs (wiki link) Y
• important towards free agency -> advancing cause of free agency Y Note: wrote in my own words; there was a missing word there.
• ballclubs Y
• Not mandatory, but consider filling in author-link in the citations, where possible e.g Jon Wertheim Y
• I will do a reference check soon

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