Talk:Jessie Murray/GA1
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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 21:08, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
Infobox
- Under "Known for," should her suffrage activism be added?
Lead
close friend Julia Turner
— Seems that they were more than friends. What about "partner" or "life partner"?
Early life and education: 1867–1910
- Seems a bit odd to preface a section about 43 of the 53 years of a person's life with "early life"
- Any reason that Murray took her mother's surname? Seems unusual.
Frances Murray and her children travelled to Edinburgh
— What about Hildyard?- Any word on what happened between 1885 and 1898?
- Is it correct to call Valentine Murray's "biographer"? I think of that as implying one who wrote a book, not an article.
- Speaking of Valentine, she spends a really tortured paragraph trying to avoid calling Murray gay. Is there anything that is more direct about Murray's relationship with Turner?
Murray also attended the lectures
— When?
Women's suffrage activism
a militant organisation for women's suffrage which eschewed violence
— In what ways is a non-violent militant group militant?29 of the statements also included details of violence that included indecency.
— This is perhaps a bit too vague; after all, one might consider any violence against protesters to be per se indecent.Their findings were published
— Where?- In a book. Not sure whether we need to dig down into that detail or not. - SchroCat (talk) 07:40, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
- It could be handy to at least cite it; after all, most articles include the names of their subjects' significant publications. I was about to helpfully point you to its title and citation information, but seems like you have that well under control. --Usernameunique (talk) 04:53, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
- In a book. Not sure whether we need to dig down into that detail or not. - SchroCat (talk) 07:40, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
Medico-Psychological Clinic
treatment by isotonized seawater
— What's this?The clinic was pioneering, according to The Institute of Psychoanalysis.
— In what way(s)? When was the assessment made?- There are no futher details
the Association of Registered Medical Women, the Psycho-Medical Society
— red-link worthy?- Looks like you might have missed this comment --Usernameunique (talk) 04:53, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
Oops, yes I did. I'll see if there is enough info to warrant an article and link it if there is. Thanks for pointing this out. - SchroCat (talk) 07:51, 9 April 2020 (UTC)- Linked both: both were folded into other organisations, so I've linked on to those. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 08:14, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
- Looks like you might have missed this comment --Usernameunique (talk) 04:53, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
Final years
- Are there any other sources (e.g., reviews, or retrospective commentary) discussing Married Love, or Murray's preface? It's a lot more frank that I would have expected for 1918. Also, did Murray publish anything else?
References
- 9: This isn't the Daily Chronicle article, but it's close, and has some extra information.
- 12, 19: These seem fairly long for short cites.
Overall
- Interesting article, SchroCat. A little on the short side, but I assume that's mainly due to what's in the sources. Minor points above --Usernameunique (talk) 21:08, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks very much. Yes, unfortunately there are very limited sources for this one. I've addressed a couple of points, and will look at the remainder in the morning. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 21:48, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
- I think I've covered all the points - at least on a first sweep. Please let me know if I've missed any, or if you want further tweaks done. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 08:02, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks, SchroCat. Looks good. I've left one suggestion above, along with a reminder about another that may have been missed. They're quite minor, however, so I'll go ahead and pass this now. --Usernameunique (talk) 04:53, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks Usernameunique. Yes, I missed the link - I'll have a look around to see what there is, and I've added a note with the full title. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 07:51, 9 April 2020 (UTC)