Talk:Jerry Lorenzo

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Bricology in topic WP:PROMO concerns

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  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 6 January 2020 and 3 April 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Swong544.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:17, 18 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

WP:PROMO concerns edit

I just added a WP:PROMO tag because most of the article sounds like an advertisement. Some phrases that stand out:

  • "Other brands did not match his vision"
  • "competitively priced sister label"
  • "to name a few"
  • "The aesthetics match Cobain’s style closely"
  • "Though many brands are pushing a similar initiative, Lorenzo's creative direction differs dramatically: he defines luxury as being your own boss and making your own schedule."
  • "Fear of God is always evolving"
  • "Lorenzo has strong knowledge about baseball and its history"
  • "added his own special touch"
  • "A moment of eureka hit Lorenzo"
  • "His idol validated his vision"

Tophtucker (talk) 17:37, 18 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

A year later, the nonsense is still in there. The article needs a serious cleaning-up. I would suggest that if someone who is sympathetic to the subject matter wants to take a shot at Wikifying it, more might remain than if I go in and do a wholesale cleaning, per WP's standards. Fair warning. Bricology (talk) 11:35, 18 February 2023 (UTC)Reply