Talk:Jerry Dybzinski/GA1
Latest comment: 21 hours ago by Rollinginhisgrave in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Nominator: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 00:49, 6 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
A very neat and tidy article, thanks for the opportunity to review, hope it's okay. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
Prose and content
editfelt comfortable enough with his development that they
unnecessary.- Don't love the triple repetition of "the season" in 1.5 sentences from
He struggled on offense during most of the season... he played during the season
, considerHe struggled on offense during most of the season, however
->Despite struggling on offense,
An injury to Veryzer gave Dybzinski more playing time in the second half of the season (the
this is a bit sports radio rather than Wikipedia, considerWhen Veryzer was injured, Dybzinski gained more playing time (the
which gave Dybzinski the inside track
bit too idiomaticwound up being the most
wasand decided to retire from professional baseball
retiredwhere he lived with his wife and three children
ominous, attribute a date
Sources
editSpot check:
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Other
edit- Image appropriately tagged
- No OR/COPYVIO : Earwig 13.8%, hard to paraphrase short sequences
- Stable
- Neutral
- Broad/summary style
Suggestions
editafter a season-ending injury to Duane Kuiper
->after Duane Kuiper incurred a season-ending injury
Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
All issues fixed. Thanks for the review. Wizardman 21:51, 17 August 2024 (UTC)
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