Talk:Jerome, Arizona/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 04:57, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

I'm always up for a geography lesson! I'm reviewing! TBrandley ^{(what's up)} 04:57, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

• "Location in Yavapai County and the state of Arizona" link the county in the caption

Done. --Another Believer _(Talk) 17:22, 13 January 2013 (UTC)

• Per WP:LEADLENGTH, the lead seems to have too many paragraphs, for an article of this size, I would only suggest three.

Reduced to three paragraphs. Finetooth (talk) 17:44, 15 January 2013 (UTC)

Thanks, FT! --Another Believer _(Talk) 17:48, 15 January 2013 (UTC)

• "Education, government" should be changed to "Education and government"

Done. --Another Believer _(Talk) 17:22, 13 January 2013 (UTC)

• Could the climate data table have more specific details; for example, days of snow in a year, and such. See the template documentation for more parameters; resources could be from the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration, National Weather Service, The Weather Channel, or National Climatic Data Center

Added a paragraph about snow, fog, and wind. Finetooth (talk) 18:32, 15 January 2013 (UTC)

There is more to come later, those are some opening comments. TBrandley ^{(what's up)} 18:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)

With FT's assistance, I believe your initial concerns have been addressed. Please let us know if you have any others. Thanks! --Another Believer _(Talk) 23:37, 15 January 2013 (UTC)

I have further comments:

• Link "2010 census" per WP:UNDERLINK in the lead
• Would suggest adding the "United States" portal

Those are the only, quick concerns I have right now, very good job writing this article indeed! TBrandley ^{(what's up)} 09:08, 26 January 2013 (UTC)

Thank you. I made both changes just now. Would the Arizona portal be better than the United States portal? Finetooth (talk) 18:03, 26 January 2013 (UTC)

Added Untied States portal to portal bar, which also links to the Arizona portal. --Another Believer _(Talk) 19:06, 26 January 2013 (UTC)

Ah, thanks. I overlooked the portal bar. Finetooth (talk) 20:31, 26 January 2013 (UTC)

No problem! --Another Believer _(Talk) 01:41, 27 January 2013 (UTC)

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