Talk:Jean McGuire

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Tschn012 in topic Improving lead

Class template edit

Iferrrerb (talk) 00:55, 14 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

Improving lead edit

I'm glad you took this subject on! Notice that you've gotten a challenge on notability. I think you have some information on her notability in the article itself (she was the first African-American woman on the Boston School Committee, right after Boston busing desegregation), so it would be helpful to show that in the lead section. I think rather than list her accomplishments, which you've done well, you could concentrate more on summary and writing in an encyclopedic style. Let me know if you need help! AmandaRR123 (talk) 22:16, 14 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

This article is really well done with great information. I edited some of the sentences for structure but beyond that this is a great start. Tschn012 (talk) 18:23, 21 March 2015 (UTC)Reply