Talk:James T. Butts Jr./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 00:28, 3 December 2014 (UTC)

Infobox

• The URL used for FN1 (California Birth Index) doesn't say anything on Butts

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:01, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• If the article's subject is known as "James T. Butts, Jr.", why is there nothing for "T" or even the initial itself in the opening sentence?

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:02, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• While citations are generally not needed in the lead section per WP:LEADCITE, I will say that FN2 (City of Inglewood) also doesn't support his birth date

I don't see where citation 2 is used to verify his birthdate. It's used in the Lede to verify his education. CorporateM (Talk) 14:03, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

Law enforcements career

• "He held that position until 2006"..... try served as chief

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:04, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• "in that position" from "Early in his tenure in that position" isn't really needed

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:06, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• "since those arrested wouldn't be prosecuted"..... avoid contractions unless part of a quote or title

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:07, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• "he said the city's infrastructure and economy had decayed"..... not sure if "decayed" is the best word choice

How about "deteriorated"? CorporateM (Talk) 14:07, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

Mayor

• Add a comma after "According to the Los Angeles Business Journal"

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:08, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• I'm skeptical about the tone of "For example" (which is used twice)

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:09, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• "Butts worked Lakers games"..... something's not right here- one can't "work" a game

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:10, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

References

• "The Los Angeles Sentinel" and "LA Sentinel" should read Los Angeles Sentinel

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:12, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• "Seattle Times" should read The Seattle Times

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:12, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• Is "Sports on Earth" a reliable source?

Not sure. It looks like a pretty in-depth professional piece, but I can't find more information on the author. CorporateM (Talk) 14:21, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• The link to "Los Angeles Wave" is dead, and I'm not sure it's a reliable source

According to their about page, it's a 100 year-old local newspaper with 1.8 million readers and the largest local weekly in the area. Seems like exactly the type of local source you'd expect for a local politician. CorporateM (Talk) 14:30, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• "LA Times" should read Los Angeles Times

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:21, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• FN5 is missing its work parameter, Santa Monica Daily Press

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:25, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

• FN's 7, 9, 17, and 19 need to have accessdates

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 14:25, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

Overall

• Well-written?: Decent, but could be better
• Verifiable?: Not entirely
• Broad in Coverage?: There is nothing on the subject's early life, his family, or how he became interested in pursuing his careers.
• Neutral?: Looks good
• Stable?: Nothing of concern
• Illustrated, if possible, by images?: The one image used is relevant, appropriately licensed, and has a suitable caption
• Pass or Fail?: The article is not complete and needs considerable expansion, so I am failing this. Do more research before renominating.