Talk:Jalen Duren/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 11:59, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
Am taking this review for the GAN March 2021 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 11:59, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Early years edit
- "He made a name for himself" - not formal writing
- AAU should be spelt out in full with the acrnoymns in parentheses
- "which he ended up sticking with as he grew older and got better." - focusing on as he grew older and improved his skills.
- "during a dominant eighth grade year." - in eighth grade. to be more formal
High school career edit
- "Duren commited to playing at" - playing high school basketball at
- Wikilink the terms points, rebounds and blocks to their respective articles for non-Basketball readers who are unfamiliar with such terms on just the first mention
- "while shooting 71% as a freshman," - the percentage symbol should be spelt out per MOS:PERCENT
- Wikilink buzzer beater
- "over regular season champs Archbishop Wood at the Palestra." - formal; champions
National team career edit
- "2017 FIBA Under-16 Americas Championship in Belém, Brazil." - 2019
- "He averaged 10.3 points, 8.2 rebounds and 2.0 blocks per game en route to a gold medal and a spot on the tournament all-star five." - all-star five team.
Player profile edit
- "Duren wields influence in the paint" - what does "paint" mean? It is a typo?
- "due to his impressive size, strength, athleticism and footwork" - tall height
- "His physically imposing frame and shot-blocking talent have drawn comparisons to Bam Adebayo." - who has made the comparisons?
- "He is recognized as the best "true post" player in his class," - recognized by whom?
- "and has been described as NBA-ready as a tenth grader." - described by whom?
References edit
- The first name of the author of Reference 2 is stated as Alexander not Alex
- Reference 4 title "BOYS' BASKETBALL: Jalen Duren Stands Tall as Roman Handles La Salle to Take First Place in Philadelphia Catholic League" - no all capital letters please per MOS:ALLCAPS
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the issues raised above MWright96 (talk) 13:25, 14 March 2021 (UTC)